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the ancient song
tranquil notes
stir my aching heart
music i hum to
because i've forgotten
the words
sung in a foreign
& ancient tongue
if you listen closely
it's gently playing
in the gush of the wind
the crashing of the waves
among the wildflowers
as they smile at the sun
all nature harmonizes
within this great melody
i find myself out of flow
& out of step
with all that is natural
the universe its self
knows the words
to the song i speak of
i wonder can you hear it too?
i knew it once
it was written in my heart
before i came to this world
& took my first breath
as a mortal child
with a great awakening
i realize it is poetry's own
written on the wind
in the ocean deep
scribe on the wildflowers
& engraved on my very soul
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Published 19th Oct 2017
| Edited 20th Oct 2017
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19th Oct 2017 11:50pm
My Lady Crim, this is a most fitting tribute to where poetry rests. It is when we hum poetry's song, the words come to us, as in this poem. There are no set words to the music, for the music awaits it's lyrics from the heart of the listener.
Sing on, oh poetess, sing on.
Sing on, oh poetess, sing on.
thank you beautiful Teri what lovely way of seeing this special music we hear.. love Brenda
19th Oct 2017 11:51pm
Magnificent imagery with a musical flow.
Telling middle bit:
"i find myself out of flow
& out of step
with all that is natural"
Yet still you harmonize with nature in your poetry...
JJ
Telling middle bit:
"i find myself out of flow
& out of step
with all that is natural"
Yet still you harmonize with nature in your poetry...
JJ
21st Oct 2017 9:33pm
thank you dearest JJ I agree the middle does show how I feel about myself.. I love that you still find me in harmony.. love Brenda
Anonymous
20th Oct 2017 00:16am
This one brings to mind homesickness for a place the body has never been but our spirits remember longingly. Such a peaceful and beautiful poem, lovely Dark Angel. I do so love you
21st Oct 2017 9:35pm
thank you lovely one yes a homesickness for a place we somehow remember that's a perfect way of seeing this poem.. I love you.. Crim
20th Oct 2017 00:47am
I've forgotten the words too
may we learn it once again
in poetry's sweet halls..
~Raven
may we learn it once again
in poetry's sweet halls..
~Raven
21st Oct 2017 9:37pm
thank you Raven yes as a poetic family I believe we will remember these words once again.. love Crim
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21st Oct 2017 9:38pm
thank you beautiful Daniella you are so wonderful did I ever tell you that? like a breath of fresh air.. so delightful.. love Brenda
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20th Oct 2017 8:51am
harmonious..that's what comes to mind..
your words cascades in a soft falsetto Crim
your words cascades in a soft falsetto Crim
21st Oct 2017 9:39pm
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21st Oct 2017 8:17pm
The lyrics may be forgotten but the magic is still there. You have it in abundance, and apply it in your own lines with genius.
Well done, Lady Crim!
Well done, Lady Crim!
21st Oct 2017 9:40pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow for such a lovely comment causing me to beam :) love Crim
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21st Oct 2017 9:42pm
thank you beautiful one for such an insightful comment yes before we came here I believe you are right.. love Crim
Anonymous
22nd Oct 2017 7:21pm
Poetry and you my love go together like peas and carrots just as the sun and wildflowers which bloom...they are meant to always be together...you leave us breathless with your vivid imagery and take us to places we can only dream of.
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
Love Taryn xoxoxox
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
Love Taryn xoxoxox
21st Dec 2017 6:53am
A lovely and melancholy piece, Brenda, had me humming along with you. Immortal music throughout life beautifully conducted by your thoughts.
Much love....David
Much love....David
21st Dec 2017 6:59pm
thank you dearest David
i'm happy you could here
its melody as you read..
love Crim
i'm happy you could here
its melody as you read..
love Crim
