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Concede
Wilted will and numbing eyes
Distant virtue, crumbling disguise
Paradoxical behaviors reign
Adolescent dreams expired
Naivety, beliefs retired
Stiffled by pure disdain
This is the death of love, you see
Wounded heart, blistered lips
Deeper through the darkness slips
Unable to taste the rain
Pounding waves in an endless day
Blackened sun cannot light the way
Repetitious is the refrain
You know, you'll be the death of me
Distant virtue, crumbling disguise
Paradoxical behaviors reign
Adolescent dreams expired
Naivety, beliefs retired
Stiffled by pure disdain
This is the death of love, you see
Wounded heart, blistered lips
Deeper through the darkness slips
Unable to taste the rain
Pounding waves in an endless day
Blackened sun cannot light the way
Repetitious is the refrain
You know, you'll be the death of me
Published 3rd Oct 2017
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3rd Oct 2017 1:39pm
I can so feel this one. It takes me back to pain I've felt and let me refeel it. Love your subtle use of alliteration and rhyme that satisfy the ear.
3rd Oct 2017 5:00pm
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2017 2:13pm
I've found that with wounds there's that initial pain, then numbness, and then the feeling starts come back. Sometimes overwhelming us for a bit. But then it fades and the world begins to stabilize. This is a heartbreaking write with a solid streak of resignation, like a sigh. Sending hugs your way, Zach
3rd Oct 2017 5:04pm
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2017 9:02pm
Zach, that first stanza pulls you in immediately...and then the dissection begins...this cut deeply...take a bow and after you’re back upright, there’s a hug waiting there for you...
Xoxo Taryn
Xoxo Taryn
3rd Oct 2017 10:16pm
Thanks Taryn. Thankfully I don't stay down for long anymore. I just get it out and then get on with it.
4th Oct 2017 7:50pm
dearest Zach I feel your desolation
& love of a person deeply in this write
this is heavy stuff..
beautiful release of emotion..
love Brenda
& love of a person deeply in this write
this is heavy stuff..
beautiful release of emotion..
love Brenda
4th Oct 2017 7:51pm
Thank you kindly. Unfortunately it was the love of a person that did not truly exist. Lesson learned.
4th Oct 2017 7:53pm
that really stings dearest Zach I can feel your deep pain sending you my love & hugs I hope writing helps release the hurt.. love Brenda
4th Oct 2017 7:55pm
It definitely does. I am feeling the love and it is greatly appreciated. Luckily this seems to be just some leftovers that are working their way out. I try to write about them no matter how strong or faded they are because someone else might be feeling the same way.
26th Dec 2017 3:41am
