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We're insane
Your lips on my neck
Bodies intertwined
Pulling me against you
Wishing it was this easy every time
Whispering your name
Losing myself in the heat
I surrender my body
It's yours to keep
Every last curve
Every last edge
Your hands slide down
Pushing me against the bed
I can't stay calm
I have to let go
Your words entice me
I'm losing control
I take over
Finally on top
Your hands on my hips
Still not ready to stop
We could do this forever
Never ending
Just passion and heat
Our bodies bending
Our breathing heavy
Our words begging
For just a little more
...yelling
Louder we get
Neighbors complain
Midnight whispers
They must think we're insane
Bodies intertwined
Pulling me against you
Wishing it was this easy every time
Whispering your name
Losing myself in the heat
I surrender my body
It's yours to keep
Every last curve
Every last edge
Your hands slide down
Pushing me against the bed
I can't stay calm
I have to let go
Your words entice me
I'm losing control
I take over
Finally on top
Your hands on my hips
Still not ready to stop
We could do this forever
Never ending
Just passion and heat
Our bodies bending
Our breathing heavy
Our words begging
For just a little more
...yelling
Louder we get
Neighbors complain
Midnight whispers
They must think we're insane
Published 13th Sep 2017
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13th Sep 2017 2:49am
13th Sep 2017 3:01am
Welcome, LightWithin
There was definitely a feeling of young passion in this write. Great job! Would not have guessed it was your first.
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There was definitely a feeling of young passion in this write. Great job! Would not have guessed it was your first.
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13th Sep 2017 6:44am
Echo Postmortal. Quite a merry passion scene, favourite lines:
We could do this forever
Never ending
Just passion and heat
Our bodies bending
We could do this forever
Never ending
Just passion and heat
Our bodies bending
13th Sep 2017 6:53am
14th Sep 2017 00:04am
You did well so don't give up
The more you do, the more it will sure up
Never think it will fail
As success is what you make
Not what others might feel.
Side note: some of the best poets never rhym in a lot of their poems so don't ever get hung up on it.
The more you do, the more it will sure up
Never think it will fail
As success is what you make
Not what others might feel.
Side note: some of the best poets never rhym in a lot of their poems so don't ever get hung up on it.
Anonymous
17th Sep 2017 5:37am
Nice poem welcome underground
19th Sep 2017 7:56pm
20th Sep 2017 1:49am
Glad I made you smile! I've been trying to work up the courage to write something more graphic but I don't know yet!
20th Sep 2017 5:49am
20th Sep 2017 1:52pm
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2017 1:09pm
Definitely would not have said this was your first writing in erotic poetry.
Beautifully done.
Beautifully done.
23rd Sep 2017 1:31pm
Thank you so much! I guess technically it wasn't... if you count text conversations with my boyfriend 😂
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2017 4:32pm
Lol , very true !
25th Sep 2017 2:12am
remarkable for a first attempt at senual eroctic dance with words-
it's brusting at the seams-
The feelings are very relatable
and as for the Neighbors- at best, they now have something to talk about..lol
peace
it's brusting at the seams-
The feelings are very relatable
and as for the Neighbors- at best, they now have something to talk about..lol
peace
25th Sep 2017 2:13am
28th Sep 2017 8:43pm
you surely are a good rider so it seems your experience speaks lovely sexy treat
28th Sep 2017 8:50pm
28th Sep 2017 8:54pm
yeah do try and read some of mine solid ones for guys and gals who have just begun enjoying the most natural desired fun
1st Oct 2024 00:58am
How interesting i never commented on this 7 years ago... you were an amazing poet, you should write more Jess!
💙 Forever, jj
💙 Forever, jj
