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So Damn Beautiful
I wanna get to know ya very intimately
I'll show you just how gentle I can be
While fulfilling all of your hidden fantasies
Before we're done with our fun you'll be demanding me
Commanding me. Don't stop! Mmmmmm, that's my spot!
As I lick your clit before I even hit you'll be cumming nonstop
The sexual relations and penetrations will fill you with such elation
From the bed to the ground I'll take in every sound like a R&B station
No need for any special occasion or persuasion for me to take care of you
I treasure bringing you pleasure in stormy weather because you're so damn beautiful
I'll show you just how gentle I can be
While fulfilling all of your hidden fantasies
Before we're done with our fun you'll be demanding me
Commanding me. Don't stop! Mmmmmm, that's my spot!
As I lick your clit before I even hit you'll be cumming nonstop
The sexual relations and penetrations will fill you with such elation
From the bed to the ground I'll take in every sound like a R&B station
No need for any special occasion or persuasion for me to take care of you
I treasure bringing you pleasure in stormy weather because you're so damn beautiful
Published 7th Sep 2017
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7th Sep 2017 6:35am
Noting last line, good passionate use of time when you're rain-bound indoors.
8th Sep 2017 7:06am
Not bad, very sexy indeed but I feel like you weren't really building up to the climax.
You really rushed it and it is important to build it up, up, up as you entice us give us that ooze of sensuality and sex appeal before finally bringing it back down to the juicy part ( no pun intended lol)
where you cool us down with the orgasmic, climax.
All in all though it wasn't bad.
You really rushed it and it is important to build it up, up, up as you entice us give us that ooze of sensuality and sex appeal before finally bringing it back down to the juicy part ( no pun intended lol)
where you cool us down with the orgasmic, climax.
All in all though it wasn't bad.
8th Sep 2017 9:44am
Lol... You're right Rocky. This was something I through together one night and didn't put as much time or thought into it like I usually do. Good to see that you observe my poetry enough to see that. Thanks for the constructive criticism. I appreciate it as usual. :-)
