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I'm always yours
hide me inside this cold night
wrap me up with stardust
and play a random dream
run to the edge of e'rything
leap and spread wings
but never take that gaze off me
I won't let you go
It's not like before
this time I am sure - to let you know,
I'm always yours...
hold on to me in darkness
when the rainbows falling
draw a silver line in me
take me to highest mountains
to the healing fountains
let the waters fill in me
Published 29th Aug 2017
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30th Aug 2017 2:24am
30th Aug 2017 2:29am
5th Sep 2017 4:30am
the repetition of the poem title felt a bit bland. and the ending of the poem felt a bit peculiar. I really like the beginning of this piece, with its sense of fantasy. I like the indented third stanza too.
5th Sep 2017 5:17am
Thank you so much for constructive critiques. :) I admit the title is a cliche, :)
Anonymous
- Edited 5th Sep 2017 8:24pm
5th Sep 2017 8:20pm
so beautiful, it's peaceful...
What a woman won't do for a man that she can feel
traces of him inside her.
lovely, breathtaking
What a woman won't do for a man that she can feel
traces of him inside her.
lovely, breathtaking
5th Sep 2017 10:30pm
