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Walk Out
Close your eyes.
Breath.
Count to ten.
Little prick can't even call
late again, no surprise
It doesn't even matter anymore
Your absence is expected
In fact restlessly desired.
To bad eventually you show up
with a trailing stench of whisky and cigars.
How dare you come in and expect sex.
That IS all it is...just sex
love is not remembered
your only thought is selfish pleasure.
I can't stand that you want a timely dinner
hot and paired with your favorite beer
Countless meals i've cooked for you,
end up packed in tupperware.
I feel sick when you display me as a trophy.
As if i'm something you deserve.
I'm not naively looking down anymore
I return deceitful piercing stares.
Ultimately you will get what you have earned.
You WILL walk in one day and look for me
only to find emptiness around, and inside you
Strength is building throughout my limbs
Just a little bit more fuel
I can do this
Count to ten
Breath
Open my eyes
Walk out the door.
Breath.
Count to ten.
Little prick can't even call
late again, no surprise
It doesn't even matter anymore
Your absence is expected
In fact restlessly desired.
To bad eventually you show up
with a trailing stench of whisky and cigars.
How dare you come in and expect sex.
That IS all it is...just sex
love is not remembered
your only thought is selfish pleasure.
I can't stand that you want a timely dinner
hot and paired with your favorite beer
Countless meals i've cooked for you,
end up packed in tupperware.
I feel sick when you display me as a trophy.
As if i'm something you deserve.
I'm not naively looking down anymore
I return deceitful piercing stares.
Ultimately you will get what you have earned.
You WILL walk in one day and look for me
only to find emptiness around, and inside you
Strength is building throughout my limbs
Just a little bit more fuel
I can do this
Count to ten
Breath
Open my eyes
Walk out the door.
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Anonymous
- Edited 8th Sep 2011 6:06am
8th Sep 2011 6:05am
Wow! This really rings true for someone I know and love. Your voice in this poem is her voice. Your thoughts, her thoughts. And I know that she wants so bad to walk out the door, too!
"You WILL walk in one day and look for me
only to find emptiness around, and inside you"
That line in particular is so honest and foreshadowing of events to come. Reminds me of a conversation I had today.
It's perfect! Thank you for sharing!
"You WILL walk in one day and look for me
only to find emptiness around, and inside you"
That line in particular is so honest and foreshadowing of events to come. Reminds me of a conversation I had today.
It's perfect! Thank you for sharing!
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8th Sep 2011 6:14am
So easy to write when the feelings are pouring out of you, isn't it?!
Thanks for the read and awesome comment!
Thanks for the read and awesome comment!
"Ultimately you will get what you have earned"
Anonymous
8th Sep 2011 6:28am
says it all wow sis i can relate to almost every god damn word you have done an excellent job,thank you for sharing this!
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re: "Ultimately you will get what you have earned"
8th Sep 2011 6:30am
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Anonymous
8th Sep 2011 5:56pm
socialbutterfly,
...all I can say is AWESOME!!!
tornado
p.s. I checked that I "liked this poem", but really, I LOVED it!!!
...all I can say is AWESOME!!!
tornado
p.s. I checked that I "liked this poem", but really, I LOVED it!!!
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Wow, what a huge compliment coming from you.
p.s. I would think, out of all people, YOUR page would have a "love this poem" button. hmm..interesting ;)
p.s. I would think, out of all people, YOUR page would have a "love this poem" button. hmm..interesting ;)
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Anonymous
8th Sep 2011 7:40pm
....what's really interesting is that we are discussing 'love buttons' on the anger page.... ; )
tornado
tornado
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Great poem!
10th Sep 2011 1:11pm
I Know how this feels, I have felt this way too (way too often) a long time ago. so glad I counted to ten... sending strength :)
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re: Great poem!
10th Sep 2011 8:47pm
So true
14th Sep 2011 3:45am
re: So true
14th Sep 2011 4:37am
Endeavor
14th Sep 2011 8:15am
Living by the consequence, is just a relation of living with the fault, your poem explains the fault in life for being the survivor, and you eradicate the fault of being reminisced. Let live to live happy; happy living is living, being happy is knowing you live...
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re: Endeavor
14th Sep 2011 7:22pm
Honesty
14th Oct 2011 10:51pm
I love this poem!! :) This is the voice for many many people in these types of relationships. This should be an anthem :)
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re: Honesty
26th Oct 2011 1:17am
WOW!!!!
13th Dec 2011 00:09am
"I feel sick when you display me as a trophy"
My life exactly...SERIOUSLY!!!....another amazing poem that describes my life in every single detail... Thank you for sharing your work!!
My life exactly...SERIOUSLY!!!....another amazing poem that describes my life in every single detail... Thank you for sharing your work!!
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re: WOW!!!!
13th Dec 2011 00:29am
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