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whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
i drink off your whiskey soul
& i feel light headed
so intoxicated by your masculine energy
you always take me there
to that mellow place
panties ablaze
an escapist
not happy with life
i reach to you
the artist who paints
cobblestone masterpieces
i walk into & get lost
your amber eyes
beckon follow me but only so far
there's a bridge
you never allow me to cross
the one to your heart
instead you touch me with your intellect
lick at my being
with that sharp cutting tool
& it dissects me
leaving only the parts
that you desire
still i crawl to you for more
as your suns set on my love
& your moons rise on my lust
i see a shadow
reflected in your glare
& know it's me who was consumed
you drank from my vodka breast
as you died in another's arms
still i wonder is your loneliness dead?
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20th Aug 2017 6:03pm
lol John :) yeah panties on fire can be dangerous ;) thank you for leaving your thoughts & giving me a smile.. love Brenda
Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
20th Aug 2017 2:00pm
There is always another bottle to be had. Maybe at the end of that one you can cross that bridge... beautiful Brenda
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Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
20th Aug 2017 2:28pm
Funny enough I recall gettin high off suckling breasts myself! Lol...this was hott lady...
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20th Aug 2017 6:05pm
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 4:19pm
My Beautiful Brenda, there are those which know which flavor needs to be set down in front of us to get us to that stage and at the same time are unable to go as far as we will even if they're drinking the same drink...we special women need that trait within them, it's what causes us to thrive as we squirm...
I love you madly, deeply
always & forever - Taryn xoxoxoxo
I love you madly, deeply
always & forever - Taryn xoxoxoxo
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20th Aug 2017 6:06pm
thank you my love his whiskey soul always takes me there I know you understand ;) I love you so much.. love Brenda
Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
20th Aug 2017 7:00pm
I hope his loneliness is very much alive and he's there for you. He should have been in the first place. A fine write with a variation on the sunrise I haven't tried.
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20th Aug 2017 7:08pm
Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
20th Aug 2017 8:03pm
I sometimes get so worried about you, a bit like a Jewish mother - I want to bring you warm hugs and chicken soup and tell you everything is gonna be all right. Don't get me wrong, your creations are beautiful, but this one disturbed me and I am not entirely sure why :-(
sending 1000 warm hugs, just for you :-)
sending 1000 warm hugs, just for you :-)
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 10:22pm
My observations here might seem a little odd but bear with me. Recently I went looking for a campsite with the offspring. One side of the bridge was...eh, okay, but not beautiful. So we went to the lush and gorgeous side to make camp. Within an hour of setting up tents an odor wafted through...and remained all night. Like rotten eggs. The other side of the bridge was less interesting but it didn't stink. Just a thought...not everything looks as good up close. Perhaps you are at the most beautiful distance already, my beautiful Dark Angel. I do so love you
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Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
21st Aug 2017 4:14am
Lick at my being. That my favorite part. It is a great piece and is very visual stimulating as you read it.
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Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
21st Aug 2017 5:24am
You've left me a bit speachless, talented one, and always with a smile.
So many emotions flowing under that bridge...
So many emotions flowing under that bridge...
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Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
21st Aug 2017 6:29pm
This is beautiful. It definitely sets everything on fire. Love the metaphors and title of the piece. Goes quite well together.
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Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
22nd Aug 2017 1:53am
From the guys side this is such a real fear for me. Do I, as I lay withering, drink from another's soul just to satisfy my desires? And in turn, as I offer them my elixir , is it never a true offering.
Thank you for the write.
Robert
Thank you for the write.
Robert
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Re. whiskey sunsets & vodka sunrises
22nd Aug 2017 5:24am
dusk & dawn, it's a dynamic cocktail, Crim;
that passionate fix just before the bridge...
that passionate fix just before the bridge...
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Anonymous
27th Aug 2017 8:14pm
Brenda.. your brilliance is powerful.. and you let your heart lead.. love you, my sister..
Dave
Dave
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