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forgotten music
take me to the beautiful places
where daisies smile at me
with their colorful dotted faces
singing forgotten songs
that i hum to
no longer knowing the words
my soul aches
something has been lost
or locked up tight
i no longer have the keys
to gain entry into this enchanted garden
& my flowers are shivering
as they are blown about
by sulfuric winds
take me to the beautiful places
my heart hurts
let the ocean's cooling waves
wash over me
cleanse me of this pain
let me gain access to Eden
where i knew the words,
the ancient ones
bringers of life
gifted from the lips of the angelic choir
the music i danced to
when i was young
& fair of heart
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Re. forgotten music
19th Aug 2017 00:54am
Vivid imagery... Brings back distant memories of summers full of flower power and hippies and music played on acoustic guitars... enjoyed very much!
JJ
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20th Aug 2017 6:07pm
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19th Aug 2017 1:40am
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2017 1:48am
Brenda.. simply brilliant.. dig this.. love you my sister..
Dave
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20th Aug 2017 6:08pm
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2017 2:48am
We don't lose the keys, beautiful. They're usually just in another pocket waiting for us to search 5 times before we check there. Missing a place we have no name for...a very familiar longing, my lovely Dark Angel. So very much love for you and hugs wrapped in daisies.
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Re: Re. forgotten music
20th Aug 2017 6:09pm
thank you lovely one for reminding me of that.. yes it's a place i've been just remember the music from another time & I find myself humming to it though no longer knowing the words.. love you lady.. Crim
Re. forgotten music
19th Aug 2017 5:49am
Going back to that thin slice of a moment in our lives!! Suddenly a scene is burned into mind by the beautiful memory of that melodic release! That song brings back a vividness to that point, allows us to focus and experience. This poem feels so upbeat the memories always sparkle and excite. Loved the little journey in your mind! Thank you for the words.
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Re: Re. forgotten music
20th Aug 2017 6:11pm
thank you Sunwolfe it does indeed transport us funny how music does that.. I deeply appreciate your thoughts & visit.. love Crim
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19th Aug 2017 8:09am
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2017 8:53am
Never cease to amaze dear Crim.
Fantastic simoltaneous stroll through memories and your thoughts.
Fantastic simoltaneous stroll through memories and your thoughts.
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20th Aug 2017 6:12pm
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 1:43am
My love, this is breathtaking...you have lost no keys, be sure of that...enchanting you are always when you take us to these places of visceral and vulnerable aching....
I love you passionately
forever & always - Taryn xoxoxox
I love you passionately
forever & always - Taryn xoxoxox
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Re: Re. forgotten music
20th Aug 2017 6:13pm
thank you my love for always showing me love & encouraging me I love you so much :) love Brenda
Re. forgotten music
20th Aug 2017 10:51am
Innocence lost? I'm sure you'll find access back to that enchanting realm before you know it, as these things have a way of coming back. Anyways...reading this stirred up some good memories that I had thought were long forgotten and I would just like to say "thank you"
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Re: Re. forgotten music
20th Aug 2017 6:14pm
thank you dearest Obsessed One I will you're right.. I'm happy this write brought about some good memories for you that makes me smile :) love Crim
Re. forgotten music
20th Aug 2017 8:00pm
Lovely work, Brenda. If you can write like this you've got plenty of innocence remaining. Love these lines:
take me to the beautiful places
my heart hurts
let the ocean's cooling waves
wash over me
cleanse me of this pain
I'm soothed just reading this. Thank you!
take me to the beautiful places
my heart hurts
let the ocean's cooling waves
wash over me
cleanse me of this pain
I'm soothed just reading this. Thank you!
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Re. forgotten music
6th Nov 2023 3:32am
If only we could go back to our childhood once in a while and revisit our past. I have wished I could do that. Beautiful write, Crimsin.
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6th Nov 2023 4:16am