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Another Space in Time
In another space in time
if I were yours and you were mine
we'd be as one for all to see
and kiss each other gleefully
we'd walk together hand in hand
and dance upon enchanted land
yet I know this can not be
for you are you and I am me
I live within the natural world
where daily duties become a whirl
anchored to the one adored
blessed by God not ignored
thankful for the things that be
thankful for not lost at sea
Published 14th Jul 2017
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Anonymous
14th Jul 2017 10:21am
Beautiful
14th Jul 2017 10:56am
14th Jul 2017 3:24pm
nature
is beautiful
so is expression
that 'feels', flows, reads natural.
critique is not critique if not honest,
penultimate couplet, L2, 'been' is extra.
not at all usual for 2 poems to enter the cold storage in one day. ;-)
is beautiful
so is expression
that 'feels', flows, reads natural.
critique is not critique if not honest,
penultimate couplet, L2, 'been' is extra.
not at all usual for 2 poems to enter the cold storage in one day. ;-)
