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it's hard to cry when you're dehydrated
the ocean is so close.
i have yet to fear drowning in it's
wide expanse,
but instead wonder about the
icy and frantic crashing waves
pulling me under,
maybe it is serene,
to stop breathing,
to give my lungs a break.
i wonder.
but i will ignore this
and continue on,
floating facedown in the ocean
i carry inside myself.
i have yet to fear drowning in it's
wide expanse,
but instead wonder about the
icy and frantic crashing waves
pulling me under,
maybe it is serene,
to stop breathing,
to give my lungs a break.
i wonder.
but i will ignore this
and continue on,
floating facedown in the ocean
i carry inside myself.
Published 11th Jul 2017
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Anonymous
12th Jul 2017 5:55am
this is really great. your phasing and description really hit home. "drowning in it's wide expanse" was a line that pulled me in and under. nice!
You really were able to capture and relay the idea of struggle when you explained how exhausting it is to just breathe.
You really were able to capture and relay the idea of struggle when you explained how exhausting it is to just breathe.
13th Jul 2017 8:36am
so vividly beautiful...
to stop breathing,
to give my lungs a break.
i wonder.
yes.. I wonder...
to stop breathing,
to give my lungs a break.
i wonder.
yes.. I wonder...
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Dec 2019 12:45pm
23rd Jul 2017 10:43am
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