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Your Beauty
People said
You were conceited in my graces
For you knew
How much I had been crushing on you
And entirely swept away at your feet too
Last night you came to visit me
While I was laying on a flower bed
It was dim with faint daylight
But I felt it golden bright as a paradise
So I was confused about, it was day or night
You walked to me in your signature way
That was shiny and stunning sway
The burgundy red velvet gown
Shimmering like silver pearls on a crown
Glowing floating sparkles
Intoxicatingly glamour and noble
I stretched out to feel your beauty
Which tickle my nerves of memory
That is how intimate we used to be
Oh, my camellia
Finally you came to my dream
Leaning over and overlooking at me
Like how intimate we used to be
Your beauty I was still familiar with
But suddenly I realized
You had gone with the wind already
With farewell songs to accompany
Left me without a message
But only petals in my pages
And the fragrance in my passages
The new house underground
With a clear burial mound
Is it safe and sound
You were inhumed in the flower room
Where I was laying to commemorate our past with gloom
With thousands of tears and numerous fears
Do you still remember me, an old comrade
Whether our love still remains, not fade
Could you promise to not forget me
Oh, my love! My camellia
I guarantee
I will always, forever worship your beauty
You were conceited in my graces
For you knew
How much I had been crushing on you
And entirely swept away at your feet too
Last night you came to visit me
While I was laying on a flower bed
It was dim with faint daylight
But I felt it golden bright as a paradise
So I was confused about, it was day or night
You walked to me in your signature way
That was shiny and stunning sway
The burgundy red velvet gown
Shimmering like silver pearls on a crown
Glowing floating sparkles
Intoxicatingly glamour and noble
I stretched out to feel your beauty
Which tickle my nerves of memory
That is how intimate we used to be
Oh, my camellia
Finally you came to my dream
Leaning over and overlooking at me
Like how intimate we used to be
Your beauty I was still familiar with
But suddenly I realized
You had gone with the wind already
With farewell songs to accompany
Left me without a message
But only petals in my pages
And the fragrance in my passages
The new house underground
With a clear burial mound
Is it safe and sound
You were inhumed in the flower room
Where I was laying to commemorate our past with gloom
With thousands of tears and numerous fears
Do you still remember me, an old comrade
Whether our love still remains, not fade
Could you promise to not forget me
Oh, my love! My camellia
I guarantee
I will always, forever worship your beauty
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Re. Your Beauty
Anonymous
8th Jul 2017 6:33pm
Wow !
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
9th Jul 2017 9:44am
Hi Ragnar, thank you for your comment and the support. Does the "Wow" mean surprisingly good? RoseJasmine
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Anonymous
6th Aug 2017 12:55pm
That it does
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
6th Aug 2017 1:24pm
Re: Re. Your Beauty
Hi Again, I really appreciate the comment and the support. I don't really agree that it's a Taiwanese way of love, but I do think it's a global way for everyone who loves flowers. RoseJasmine
Re: Re. Your Beauty
10th Jul 2017 3:35pm
i like ur poetry Taiwanese or not it's still lovely compose more why don't u read mine too please do
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
10th Jul 2017 4:28pm
I did read some of them and just made a comment. But honestly, you wrote too fast for me to read and comment. Sorry! I will try! RoseJasmine
Re: Re. Your Beauty
14th Jul 2017 2:53am
i just composed one on ur theme u may read and Like how '''intimate'' we used to be. ===juliet with juliet as guys normally and usually do romeo over romeo
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
14th Jul 2017 3:04am
Re. Your Beauty
9th Jul 2017 10:22am
Re: Re. Your Beauty
9th Jul 2017 1:40pm
Hi Lana, thank you for the comment and the support. Glad you can feel the strong feeling. RoseJasmine
Re. Your Beauty
10th Jul 2017 2:05pm
This poem has excellent imagery and description. I find that to be your strongpoint. Your voice is well heard in addition to the poem being well written.
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
10th Jul 2017 3:01pm
Hello Wanderlust, welcome to DU, and thank you so much for reading my poem and giving such nice comments. It's really nice to hear you say so. Yeah, you really got the point. I tried hard to make readers see what I was talking about. The imgery is always an important element in my poem. Glad you can feel that. RoseJasmine
Re. Your Beauty
14th Jul 2017 5:10am
Liked the simplicity and beauty of this poem. Seemed every moment is real, could feel the moments.
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
Thank you for the comment which seems to be very sincere. Yeah, everything is real except that she isn't a person. I am so sad for losing her. RoseJasmine
Re. Your Beauty
14th Jul 2017 10:51am
RJ, your beauty, is a beauty! Impressive and full of vivid scenes that play thru the mind softly... bravo!
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Re. Your Beauty
14th Jul 2017 11:41am
Hi my dear friend, glad to read your comment, and the praise from you is especially precious. Thank you for the always support. RoseJasmine
Re. Your Beauty
18th Jul 2017 7:48pm
While I was lying on a flower bed.
could be better as LAYING
Coz lying = lie at times
and thanks for the sms i rarely reply
composed again on this
read it o miss
could be better as LAYING
Coz lying = lie at times
and thanks for the sms i rarely reply
composed again on this
read it o miss
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Re. Your Beauty
18th Jul 2017 8:33pm
Re: Re. Your Beauty
20th Jul 2017 4:31am
glad you were laying but now also say were you laid hahaha funny me love to make all aaaaa laaaffffff did you !
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Re: Re. Your Beauty
20th Jul 2017 7:27am
I don't know if I am supposed to laugh....."were you laid" is a passive term....so No at that situation. I know you like to drive everybody crazy! Ha!
Re: Re. Your Beauty
6th Aug 2017 4:08pm
no not really in sexy talks common guys and gals r more happy when they all r youngly mostly sololililily that still u b
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Re. Your Beauty
Anonymous
2nd Aug 2017 3:46am
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2nd Aug 2017 5:22pm
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