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rain ii
not just drops of water
a thousand embraces
of bonded elements
crashing liquid blossoms
on scarred bodies, scorched souls
reunion of waters
calcium walls en-cage
ocean tempestuous
whilst clay assimilates
Published 30th Jun 2017
| Edited 2nd Jul 2017
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intense! your language ..could feel this, the rain-drenched and absorbing bodysouls are temples from this bonded fusion..after all the burnt and pains. Yes, I know and feel this burntness very well..rain is the only meditation, the liberation.
The third stanza is complex...but reflects the beautiful chaos, this life destined from love! Beautifully written...shine on your uniqueness art more dear c_f
The third stanza is complex...but reflects the beautiful chaos, this life destined from love! Beautifully written...shine on your uniqueness art more dear c_f
7th Jul 2017 11:16am
contentment- the key to joy
attained. blessed peer.
leaving such review.
".rain is the only meditation, the liberation. "
appreciation held closest.
futile. is, any attempt to reciprocate in kindness.
rain
is always
evocative.
hence the poems it liberates.
:-)
attained. blessed peer.
leaving such review.
".rain is the only meditation, the liberation. "
appreciation held closest.
futile. is, any attempt to reciprocate in kindness.
rain
is always
evocative.
hence the poems it liberates.
:-)
3rd Jul 2017 9:04pm
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4th Jul 2017 7:45pm
the minutiae matter most, no?
the contrast of s2 is breathtaking, cold one
that first line, the juxtaposition
ah, soul cleansing
indeed
the contrast of s2 is breathtaking, cold one
that first line, the juxtaposition
ah, soul cleansing
indeed
:-)
yes. they matter.
nature.
expresses. in patterns.
rain. but one of them.
appreciation is held closest.
as expressed above to the other esteemed peer, words are poor transporters of emotions.
:-)
yes. they matter.
nature.
expresses. in patterns.
rain. but one of them.
appreciation is held closest.
as expressed above to the other esteemed peer, words are poor transporters of emotions.
:-)
