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Why I am the way I am
I am as cold as stone for fear of being used and left alone
Devotion I can give faithful I can live but I can’t seem to find someone worthy of those things I have to give
I’m not a “hoochie” who dishes out the “coochie”
My body is a temple and I’m pretty plan and simple
A walk now and then,a kiss that’s not pretend
Compassion, honesty; things that are of importance to me
People tell me don’t seek and you shall find but I’m running out of patience and I’m tired of men wasting my time
I’m worthy to be loved, appreciated and respected but it seems those types of females are the ones to be rejected
Where are the honorable men, the “True Devotion” men? the men who recognize a true prize and never let that vision of love leave their minds
From the eloquent words of Queen Badu “I want somebody to walk up behind me and kiss me on my neck and breathe on my neck.”put me in the bliss of life and I'll be content.
Sexy? yes. Celibate? Yes. But all this mess is making me sick to death.
© Coco Irving 2004
Published 31st Aug 2011
| Edited 25th Apr 2012
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31st Aug 2011 1:52am
I can hear it as I read it; you have a great natural rhythm, but it faulters in second half
"worthy of those thing for of to give." this is awkward
"worthy of what I have to give" might work better
some spelling issues..
for me, seems like a good start, but could use cleaning up
"worthy of those thing for of to give." this is awkward
"worthy of what I have to give" might work better
some spelling issues..
for me, seems like a good start, but could use cleaning up
Thank you for your creative feedback, it is greatly appreciated. I am beginning to find my way.
