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Forbidden Flavours
I dream of all I should not desire
To burn myself in a woman’s fire
Her silky skin those tempting lips
Her angel eyes, curvaceous hips
This hunger inside I dare not feed
From the first glance you planted the seed
I ache to taste your forbidden flavour
For every taste I would savour
These fantasies I do so well to hide
Until you walked right by my side
Lured me with your sweet smell
Im now caged in a sexual hell
To burn myself in a woman’s fire
Her silky skin those tempting lips
Her angel eyes, curvaceous hips
This hunger inside I dare not feed
From the first glance you planted the seed
I ache to taste your forbidden flavour
For every taste I would savour
These fantasies I do so well to hide
Until you walked right by my side
Lured me with your sweet smell
Im now caged in a sexual hell
Published 25th Aug 2011
| Edited 27th Aug 2011
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Anonymous
25th Aug 2011 5:59pm
RedEmma,
I really liked this one. You first stanza had a nice flow and was Great! The next two, I think, with your talent, you could have them matching up to the first one fairly easily. All the while reading this I thought this to be your fantasy, but your last line sort of threw me. But that's just me. Overall, like I said, I really like this one. Thanks for sharing.
tornado
I really liked this one. You first stanza had a nice flow and was Great! The next two, I think, with your talent, you could have them matching up to the first one fairly easily. All the while reading this I thought this to be your fantasy, but your last line sort of threw me. But that's just me. Overall, like I said, I really like this one. Thanks for sharing.
tornado
26th Aug 2011 3:55pm
Forbidden by whom?, what?, where?, how?, why?
In the world I live in it would be refreshing to find something "forbidden" just to take a look at it. "Holy moley, look..it's forbidden. What is it?" "Damned if I know."
:)
Peace Red.
In the world I live in it would be refreshing to find something "forbidden" just to take a look at it. "Holy moley, look..it's forbidden. What is it?" "Damned if I know."
:)
Peace Red.
Fantasies are only fantasies because they are forbidden surely, otherwise I would make it a reality?
Anonymous
26th Aug 2011 9:22pm
Holy cow!!! Eve slept with a woman?!! I've got me some reading to ctach up on...Sorry, just kidding. Couldn't resist ; )
You have some good points, and beautiful hair as well. Going back a rereading, it all makes better sense now. It's all in how it's phrased. I need to read slower, now I have a better sense of your hell. Great job!
tornado
Anonymous
27th Aug 2011 9:10am
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Anonymous
27th Aug 2011 10:44am
I enjoyed this, liked the flavour :)
I liked the open yet cheaky style,
I had fun reading it!
I do think you have a spelling or T/O in the first line of the last stanza maybe???
Good one!
Al
I liked the open yet cheaky style,
I had fun reading it!
I do think you have a spelling or T/O in the first line of the last stanza maybe???
Good one!
Al
27th Aug 2011 11:08am
It feels so good to hear positive comments and I appreciate the spelling corrections.
