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Until That Day💌
Was it London, Paris or Rome?
Strangers who’s stars had crossed and yet
Better than that, on the Internet
Where we met in each other’s home!
The first real-time meeting one day!
Will I be shy (I'm not!), will he?
Shall I betray a quaking she
Who lives a life with feet of clay?
I giggle at those words I say
That I just now have written.
He knows how much I like to chat,
I’m worse though when I’m smitten!
Oh how he loves my chirpy voice,
Unless he calls when I’m asleep.
I just adore to make him laugh;
Because I am the silly half!
The moment of our very first,
A dizzy face-to-face romance,
Will one day be at hand-to-hand,
Which sounds just like a combat stance!
I'll get to see his hands before
He reaches out and touches more
With fingers that speak love to me
As we shake uncontrollably.
And then his mouth begins to twitch
To hear it start to say to me
In boyish tones that make me itch,
"Hi Jadey...", he says valiantly.
Our feet will mash potatoes as
We blush and carry on which has
Our little dance as we connect
The anticipated effect.
From ‘puter screens of quiet light
Into a mounting hope between.
Our fervent thoughts, a jubilee
Of celebrating hearts in flight!
The walk from bus to motorcar
To reach and hold each other tight
From cyber places we have been
Like where we’re almost always in.
For everything of love we did
And still turn into timid kids.
You mean tongue-tied? I couldn’t say.
Cause we won’t know until that day.
Published 15th Apr 2017
| Edited 6th Jun 2018
Author's Note
Previously titled Birds of a Feather.
(day 15)
(day 15)
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what a lovely poem to greet the day -
ah the shudders of new love... the uncontrolled jitters that seem to come from every cell of your body turned on - all at once!
how very exciting
loving this
tommy
ah the shudders of new love... the uncontrolled jitters that seem to come from every cell of your body turned on - all at once!
how very exciting
loving this
tommy
15th Apr 2017 3:02pm
Thank you so much, tommy... I've begun to shiver anew just from reading your response!
15th Apr 2017 2:58pm
Echo Geoff!
Jadey- not free riding but somehow Geoff tends to always upend me with words I try and fail to convey!
Goodluck!! :-)
KDAmB
Jadey- not free riding but somehow Geoff tends to always upend me with words I try and fail to convey!
Goodluck!! :-)
KDAmB
15th Apr 2017 3:03pm
Aww thank you, my dearest endless friend! You're always welcome to come visit anytime with whatever words you can present to me... it's always good to hear from you, my chirpy one!
15th Apr 2017 9:26pm
i spent some time learning about the magpie...great reference...thank you :)
16th Apr 2017 3:05am
16th Apr 2017 9:12pm
You flock together beautifully Jade. There's a joy and playfulness to this that's irresistible.
Of all the love we've made so much
And still become two timid kids
You mean tongue-tied? That can't be us
Until we'd finally meet again!
Can't imagine you at a loss for words, Lady Jade. My feathers are ruffled by these charming lines.
Of all the love we've made so much
And still become two timid kids
You mean tongue-tied? That can't be us
Until we'd finally meet again!
Can't imagine you at a loss for words, Lady Jade. My feathers are ruffled by these charming lines.
16th Apr 2017 10:31pm
Heheh, thanks so much, my crowfly friend... hey! the magpie & the crow, what merry meet I could compose in a poetic greet! :D
25th Apr 2017 5:28am
the stanza formatting felt a bit odd, as there wasn't really any notable continuous rhyming or rhythm. I really like the blend of mystery and excitement in this piece. my favorite stanza was the seventh one.
I’ve deleted my original reply because I recently did a total revision of the piece, which, among several new details, now has a rhyme scheme thus a tighter & consistent cadence. Therefore, I’m about to enter it in your 32nd romance competition (the 2nd of two).😃
10th Dec 2017 8:24pm
in the sixth stanza, some of the rhymes felt a bit weak. i like the continual atmosphere of mystery and excitement.
1st Mar 2018 4:16pm
I’ve deleted my original reply because I recently did a total revision of the piece, which, among several new details, now has a rhyme scheme thus a tighter & consistent cadence. Therefore, I’m about to enter it in your 32nd romance competition (the 2nd of two).😃
27th Mar 2018 10:35pm
this felt a bit long. i like the opening of this poem, as well as the fourth stanza.
28th Mar 2018 1:25am
I thank you for your thoughts, and smiled about the stanzas you like most. It’s nice you shared that.
Anonymous
30th Nov 2018 10:41pm
Jadey,
I really like your love poems. You're really a sweet person.
Matthew.
I really like your love poems. You're really a sweet person.
Matthew.
1st Dec 2018 00:18am
Why thank you, Matthew, my friend. I have to smile, that now you know the truth about me.
Jadey🌻
Jadey🌻
