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Paradise Lost
If only I could...
Swim great depths of the ocean with mermaids,
lay on large rocks to sing and in sunlight bathe.
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Run wild with unicorns to the fierce beat of my heart,
be free from humans and worlds apart.
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Dance naked and carelessly with nymphs all day,
allow sweet melodies to carry me far away.
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Published 3rd Apr 2017
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3rd Apr 2017 9:40am
The place i'm at right now is so beautiful. It depresses me that i'll have to go back home soon... haha. Very much feel this poem today.
3rd Apr 2017 10:08am
Oh I know that feeling all too well :I thanks for the read and RL adds. Hope you are well 😘 FC 💜
3rd Apr 2017 11:42am
3rd Apr 2017 12:21pm
3rd Apr 2017 12:06pm
This is a wonderfully written piece and it exudes the self between those lines
I just love the separation in the stanzas.
The use of the visual imagery is fantastic (The Mermaid and dancing images are definitely my faves)
Your short yet meaningful piece really shows a magnificent understanding of writing FOR the reader, it's stunning
Love IT!
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I just love the separation in the stanzas.
The use of the visual imagery is fantastic (The Mermaid and dancing images are definitely my faves)
Your short yet meaningful piece really shows a magnificent understanding of writing FOR the reader, it's stunning
Love IT!
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3rd Apr 2017 12:24pm
Wowzers Al, a comment like this from you thrills me to bits! Thank you! 😆 FC 💜
3rd Apr 2017 2:25pm
3rd Apr 2017 2:48pm
Anonymous
10th Jun 2017 2:42am
Nice rhyming I like that paradise you speak of. Here's to paradise. Thanks for your kind comment on my 'Election Day!' poem also.
