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Fleeting are the moments of our lives, Chiyo. Gripping imagery that has me cloud watching on an overcast, rainy day.
26th Mar 2017 7:56pm
Having triggered the wish to watch clouds on an overcast sky by my little haiku makes me giggle. Hope you were able to keep them apart :-).
Thank you, Ahavati for the kind comment!
Thank you, Ahavati for the kind comment!
26th Mar 2017 10:35pm
"Then ... gone ... on ... wind ..." the alliteration on the 3rd line gives the Haiku an added spark of movement you can almost feel the whoosh of the wind signalling the temporality of life. Really nicely done.
3rd Apr 2017 8:34pm
Your comment makes me happy since I exactly tried to achieve the image of movement. The movement of life, sometimes like a whoooooosh, like you said, sometimes like observational clouds, just hanging around :-). Thank you, Josh!
26th Mar 2017 11:47pm
3rd Apr 2017 8:40pm
A clear picture is what we try to present to the reader, isn't it? I'm glad if you think I succeded in giving a vision of life passing by. Thank you, xmar82!
27th Mar 2017 2:46am
3rd Apr 2017 8:47pm
Cirrus, sure, they look so vivid! But life's more than onl cirruses, it's a mixture of high clouds, mid clouds and low clouds. Cirrus, stratus, cumulus, And they provide us withso many different weather conditions like life itself. Thanks a lot, Soul :-)!
