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Incomplete, me
Born of beauty, lust and sin; a whispered name
on lovers' wanton lips beguiles.
I trace the silken fibers of carnality, naked
and beckoning of intrinsic penetration.
A harbinger of solidarity, reflecting pools flood
the portage trail where we are set adrift on currents
that submerge sanguine expectations of solitude
rode beyond a warlord sun, a burning star.
Orgasmic waves assault walls of given surrender mercilessly
and I swallow the saffron heat of anguish. Love is cataclysmic;
I weep for it. I cling to it with Trophonian arms
and a heart imbued with dolor.
"Love is the voice under all silences,
the hope which has no opposite in fear;
the strength so strong mere force is feebleness:
the truth more first than sun, more last than star." — E.E. cummings
(Artwork by: Gerard Fieret)
on lovers' wanton lips beguiles.
I trace the silken fibers of carnality, naked
and beckoning of intrinsic penetration.
A harbinger of solidarity, reflecting pools flood
the portage trail where we are set adrift on currents
that submerge sanguine expectations of solitude
rode beyond a warlord sun, a burning star.
Orgasmic waves assault walls of given surrender mercilessly
and I swallow the saffron heat of anguish. Love is cataclysmic;
I weep for it. I cling to it with Trophonian arms
and a heart imbued with dolor.
"Love is the voice under all silences,
the hope which has no opposite in fear;
the strength so strong mere force is feebleness:
the truth more first than sun, more last than star." — E.E. cummings
(Artwork by: Gerard Fieret)
Written by
Kasai
Published 12th Mar 2017
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Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 2:25am
it's a showcase in a gallery, Kas,
poem, art, Cummings quote;
orgasmic surrender in Trophonian embraces...
poem, art, Cummings quote;
orgasmic surrender in Trophonian embraces...
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 2:50am
Beautiful, John, thank you so much. The way we embrace such things, holding them all very close, just as it should be...
Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 3:21am
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12th Mar 2017 4:44pm
Re. Incomplete, me
I love ' I swallow the saffron heat of anguish ' it's a great sounding line, and ' currents that submerge sanguine expectations of solitude ' I like how you stretch the definitions of the words ( like saffron ) to create deeper meanings....
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 8:36pm
Poetry must be the product of deeper thoughts, the way our minds drift into those places. Thanks so much for taking the time to share yours with me, I truly appreciate those...
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Anonymous
12th Mar 2017 3:26am
Lady Kasai ...
you are in a class
all your own ...
~xo, Devlin
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 8:39pm
Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 9:19am
Ok...ok...you done me in (again) the sensuality, n romanticism, n ee Cummings??!! Woooooooooooww...loved this!!
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 8:42pm
Cummings, who wouldn't love it? And what a great comment, too. Thank you much for enjoying my words, and stopping in to read...
Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 9:39am
You took me to places unknown with all your unique metaphors and innuendo....I weep for it.as well
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 8:44pm
Glad you enjoyed the journey, and I thank you for the lovely visit. Very much appreciated...
Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 4:43pm
Silencing as the stars, Kas. As close as their distance is to the touch of closed eyes and open hearts.
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 8:46pm
What a beautiful comment, Ahavati, closed eyes and open hearts, so lovely. Thank you much, wise one...
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Anonymous
12th Mar 2017 5:48pm
Sweet Kasai...there is no favorite line here for me...each is haunting in its beauty and elegant sophistication...you have left me in awe more times than I can count at this point...pen respect beautiful...
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
12th Mar 2017 8:50pm
I needed the smile today, Taryn, such a sweet lady you are. I so enjoy these lovely visits of ours and I just adore your comments. Thank you, much...
Re. Incomplete, me
14th Mar 2017 4:17am
When I find more space on my extraordinary list, yes
this is coming with mami!
Muwah, too sexy
-Howlings
this is coming with mami!
Muwah, too sexy
-Howlings
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14th Mar 2017 5:23pm
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14th Mar 2017 5:28pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th Mar 2017 7:23am
15th Mar 2017 7:22am
wonderful stuff
I really like your voice here. there's a nice language which is different yet familiar.
I thought there may have been one or two words which seemed excess or a bit too much description. certainly not a huge deal but maybe something to think about in the future
an example might be orgasmic on the last stanza. it's kind of touch and go ( s'cuse the pun) in that it changed your tone a little. a slight language change
intrinsic might be be an example too.
but look, it's just an opinion. I think what you've written here is commendable and the quote at the end was a nice touch too
I really like your voice here. there's a nice language which is different yet familiar.
I thought there may have been one or two words which seemed excess or a bit too much description. certainly not a huge deal but maybe something to think about in the future
an example might be orgasmic on the last stanza. it's kind of touch and go ( s'cuse the pun) in that it changed your tone a little. a slight language change
intrinsic might be be an example too.
but look, it's just an opinion. I think what you've written here is commendable and the quote at the end was a nice touch too
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
20th Mar 2017 5:57pm
Excellent comment; I always appreciate a good critique. Kind of you to take the time to share your thoughts and I truly appreciate it. Thanks much...
Re. Incomplete, me
15th Mar 2017 2:41pm
This poem's language is rich to the point of delirium, and while that does threaten to overwhelm the reader's sense of place and character, when read aloud it makes a very compelling experience. This is a poem which feels born to be read aloud, in a voice responsive to the erotic nature of it. x
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Re: Re. Incomplete, me
20th Mar 2017 6:01pm
Such a wonderful comment, always love to hear the opinion of another poet, especially one who's writing I enjoy so much. Thanks for the kind words, Jack...
Re. Incomplete, me
20th Mar 2017 1:19pm
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https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9494/
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
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20th Mar 2017 6:05pm