Fallen for a Dream

I enjoyed the depth of this, Ramblers. It reminds me of Sufi wisdom, contemplation, and journeying through the self for answers. I see Gibran is one of your favorites. I love his book "The Prophet", especially the chapter on Love. I know you've asked for honest critique, and I'd like to honor that; however, I feel some of the translation is from English not being your first language. Is that correct?

Welcome to the Deep Side.

Thank you Ahavati for leaving me a comment with words of appreciation.You got it right above piece is inspired from sufi wisdom. My friend i haven't as of yet read Gibrans book called "The Prophet" (yeah i know it kind of sounds stupid but that is truth). I have read many of his quotes about love and which left me mesmerised,as a result of that i have mentioned him as my favorite . You are right, that english is not my first language but i dont understand what you mean by these wrods" I feel some of the translation is from English"

I simply meant than when writing in a language that isn't our first by nature, we inadvertently misuse certain tenses, etc. For example,  

Fallen for a Dream

In order to seek answers to riddle, that the life is  

Take this first line and its enjambment into the next. Although chocked with direction, it doesn't read smooth and certain tenses, or perhaps syntax is a bit muddled. There are different ways you could go with it. First, you could say:

In order to seek answers to [the/a] riddle that life is (or is life? If the former then say Observed. If the latter, Observe is correctly used.)
Observe, until there is nothing left to Observe (or nothing more to Observe - you don't need left and more)

It could read

In order to seek answers to the riddle that is life
Observe until there is nothing left to observe  

As a side note - I was intrigued over your capitalization of the second Observe, as though it was holy of sorts to pay attention to the moment. If you think about that, it is.  

It's difficult for me to fully grasp what you're trying to say because English IS my first language. Furthermore, I don't speak your language, even as a second. Therefore, I struggle with offering critique of this nature.

Thank you for help Ahavati..i have made the changes as you suggested .and also have tried my best to remove the ambiguity about message behind this poem... as a result i have made some changes of my own too so that one can get what i am trying to convey more clearly this time around...As you pointed out rightly... i don't have good grip over tenses..hence any help in that regard would be appreciated..

KhushAamDeed bro!

Shukriya Dost

The revisions definitely read much better.

Thanks ahavati for the help to make it better