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Ethical Slut
I can sell my body
and still be a saint.
Men can tie me up
Hell, women can too,
but they'll never bound my freedom
my tongue
my virtue
So, I'll keep turning tricks
while you jut your noses to the sky.
Not a victim,
Nor the culprit.
I go by my own pace
Afterall it's my body; for me to dictate.
to dominate
to appreciate
and still be a saint.
Men can tie me up
Hell, women can too,
but they'll never bound my freedom
my tongue
my virtue
So, I'll keep turning tricks
while you jut your noses to the sky.
Not a victim,
Nor the culprit.
I go by my own pace
Afterall it's my body; for me to dictate.
to dominate
to appreciate
Published 20th Aug 2011
| Edited 24th Aug 2011
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23rd Aug 2011 00:09am
23rd Aug 2011 2:15am
i got here via your thread.
it seems all present and correct. in terms of grammar and punctuation the period at the end of
line 4 might not be right because you start the next line with but, i think that if you replace the period with a coma and not capitalize the 'b'on 'but' it might be better.i am not sure about the period at the end of L13 either, though it may be o.k,
i like the way you have taken on the subject matter.
all in i think you have a good poem here.
nice one!
it seems all present and correct. in terms of grammar and punctuation the period at the end of
line 4 might not be right because you start the next line with but, i think that if you replace the period with a coma and not capitalize the 'b'on 'but' it might be better.i am not sure about the period at the end of L13 either, though it may be o.k,
i like the way you have taken on the subject matter.
all in i think you have a good poem here.
nice one!
24th Aug 2011 4:09am
Thank you very much Eamon!
I fixed it, I was iffy with the punctuation too.
I fixed it, I was iffy with the punctuation too.
26th Aug 2011 5:15am
im not sure if i agree but dis goes hard
& usen shorthand doesnt make u a retard
it jus means i dont like 2 type
but i wil hit da keys 4 sumthin dat i like
& wut u said was so very profound
it left me feeln amazed...totally astound
"i can sell my body & stil b a saint"
wel i dont judge so i wont say u can or u cant
but 1 thing is 4 sure
dats ur journey 2 endure
so gr8 job wit da words & dats all i can really say
i mean u only liv once so u mite as wel do it ur way....
& usen shorthand doesnt make u a retard
it jus means i dont like 2 type
but i wil hit da keys 4 sumthin dat i like
& wut u said was so very profound
it left me feeln amazed...totally astound
"i can sell my body & stil b a saint"
wel i dont judge so i wont say u can or u cant
but 1 thing is 4 sure
dats ur journey 2 endure
so gr8 job wit da words & dats all i can really say
i mean u only liv once so u mite as wel do it ur way....
26th Aug 2011 6:09am
I'm sorry about my earlier comments on your typing, it's just really bothersome to me.
Thank you for liking my poem.
I must clarify that this poem is about sex workers and how they're often misunderstood and slagged for it. I'm a very avid supporter of pro-sex feminism and stopping hate against sex workers.
I however am not a sex worker.
Thank you for liking my poem.
I must clarify that this poem is about sex workers and how they're often misunderstood and slagged for it. I'm a very avid supporter of pro-sex feminism and stopping hate against sex workers.
I however am not a sex worker.
26th Aug 2011 7:06am
dats wassup & like i said a person only lives once so y not live it da way he or she wants....but der r consequences 2 everything....lol
29th Nov 2011 4:57pm
Have some moral dignity in yourself. Men can be sluts, and so can women. You need to fall in love and not cheat on your man.
29th Nov 2011 8:06pm
Cheating is irrelevant with this piece.
It is much more of an 'anthem' for sex workers ...both men and women alike. However, I'm a woman so I made it in a feminine pov.
Thank you for reading. :)
It is much more of an 'anthem' for sex workers ...both men and women alike. However, I'm a woman so I made it in a feminine pov.
Thank you for reading. :)
9th Mar 2014 9:04am
I really like this piece, a womans body is hers and hers alone, what she chooses to do with it is her own business.
