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the salt
1) in no agendas
your lashes sway, slow and monstrous
interlocks mine in a stun, your blinding suns
nacreous tears atomize, our vapourizing breaths
afloat swampy myristica fragrans mist
battling knuckles vanish, our crushing trysts
and discoveries-
your stilting roots
in my near stupor airs
2) the animal let loose
in murderous hunger spree
of blood splatters
gazes a praying deer
his torturous rage fits corporate flair
walls absorb her release traceless
her remnant salt, spills on the floor
you stamp, are infusing shards
of a lethal kill
Published 21st Feb 2017
| Edited 25th Feb 2017
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21st Feb 2017 3:20pm
A voracious Write in deed Uma!!!
Excellent to see You around town again-You've been missed!!!
Excellent to see You around town again-You've been missed!!!
22nd Feb 2017 11:21am
ahh soul poet, tq fr your coming read n love. its only tat i am ever here, in silence or offline or less words or more. i feel my belonging frever here. xx
22nd Feb 2017 2:12pm
Consumed by passion in tbe heat of a covetous glare. We are water and the salt of being. So glad to see you back, Uma.
25th Feb 2017 10:40pm
Tq for the read n words, the need is the salt ..whatever..in tears of oneness or when tearing the other. i am at a strange n infinite peace this tym, after more tears n burns , to be back here my friend. Love frev xx
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2017 3:47pm
there are no words for how good it is to read you again uma & to ponder your saline offerings
xo
xo
25th Feb 2017 10:46pm
Ahh how beautiful is that 'no words' you say u poet inimitable n full of artful words !:) Tq dear fr being here, leaving ur inspirations. Am honoured xx
26th Feb 2017 12:02pm
I love the contrast between (1) and (2) almost like the first was the the net capturing it's prey and the second was the killing and feeding of said prey. How one can be fooled in the early part of a relationship, to believe it is all hearts and flowers, and further down the line, the true colours show.
Wonderful writing as always Uma, in your unique way. :) x
Wonderful writing as always Uma, in your unique way. :) x
1st Mar 2017 1:26pm
love is taken & sometimes eradicated
but the hunt is always;
exquisite poem...
but the hunt is always;
exquisite poem...
11th Mar 2017 8:58am
isnt that the wildness very intrinsic of the puristics- freedom, love, truth, nature.. all others the choking dusts therein are hidden to be dissolving to nullness ultimately hopefully: the greys the overly mind the hunt the hate the demons. Its juz me JF in blabber mode of needful lunatic vent:)...your statements of feedback kindle words depths. tq adored poet fr being here. xx
The monster that exalted passion and overwhelmed her senses, is now the destroyer, unleashed within her walls, leaving nothing, remanants of her essence, perhaps the salt, her crystallised passion, the scattered shards of hope.
This is the Uma I recall, the confidence in her poetry is creeping back with the brazen imagery, sounds and smells, delicately beaten into her unique style of dark and tantalising poetry. I very much liked this concise and poetically powerful offering of the salt. Well done!
This is the Uma I recall, the confidence in her poetry is creeping back with the brazen imagery, sounds and smells, delicately beaten into her unique style of dark and tantalising poetry. I very much liked this concise and poetically powerful offering of the salt. Well done!
