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Alone in paradise.
Memories..
Rush out of me in a force like white frothy foam from the sea.
I stop to catch my breath.
My shoulders ache and are bronzed from the hot sun.
For moments, I stand frozen, ensnared in time.
Emotions continue to bubble and boil over.
Far off into the distance, boats loll on gentle waves.
A pang throbs inside my chest and I inhale.
The fragrant scent of ocean air fills my nostrils.
I exhale, sharply.
Light begins to fade into an indigo sunset.
Salt water and sweat form a pool between my breasts.
It is warm even at dusk.
Laughter startles me from my daze.
Suddenly, I turn to leave.
The shrill cries of gulls follow me home.
There is beauty in every direction I choose to go.
My footprints leave an imprint on white sand.
It feels like the lonliest place on earth without you.
Rush out of me in a force like white frothy foam from the sea.
I stop to catch my breath.
My shoulders ache and are bronzed from the hot sun.
For moments, I stand frozen, ensnared in time.
Emotions continue to bubble and boil over.
Far off into the distance, boats loll on gentle waves.
A pang throbs inside my chest and I inhale.
The fragrant scent of ocean air fills my nostrils.
I exhale, sharply.
Light begins to fade into an indigo sunset.
Salt water and sweat form a pool between my breasts.
It is warm even at dusk.
Laughter startles me from my daze.
Suddenly, I turn to leave.
The shrill cries of gulls follow me home.
There is beauty in every direction I choose to go.
My footprints leave an imprint on white sand.
It feels like the lonliest place on earth without you.
Written by
LostGirl18
Published 16th Feb 2017
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Re. Alone in paradise.
19th Feb 2017 12:43pm
Re. Alone in paradise.
19th Feb 2017 7:54pm
Thank you SweetOblivion for taking the time to read my poem and comment. It means a lot. (:
Re. Alone in paradise.
20th Feb 2017 1:59am
The desolation of this is palpable yet beautifully filled with relatable imagery.
Welcome to the deep side.
Welcome to the deep side.
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Re. Alone in paradise.
20th Feb 2017 3:08am
Ahavati, I want to sincerely thank you for your critique of my poem. I am so very appreciative to receive any feedback from you. Your writing inspires me to better my own. Humbly, I thank you.
Re. Alone in paradise.
20th Feb 2017 4:08am
Re. Alone in paradise.
20th Feb 2017 9:01pm
Memories can trigger different emotions in people. It's all relative. Thank you for your kind feedback Kavik1.
Re. Alone in paradise.
26th Feb 2017 10:31am
Re. Alone in paradise.
1st Mar 2017 6:27am
Thank you Spanker! I am most flattered that you have added my poem to your reading list. (:
Re. Alone in paradise.
Very charming descriptions! I feel like I'm right there with you. Lovely poem LG!
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Re. Alone in paradise.
11th Mar 2017 7:31pm
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Re: Re. Alone in paradise.
17th Aug 2019 1:33am
Read me.
All of me.
And then have yourself a bourbon .
Cheers. 🥃
Your drinking buddy,
LostGirl
P.S. Thank you for the insight. (:
All of me.
And then have yourself a bourbon .
Cheers. 🥃
Your drinking buddy,
LostGirl
P.S. Thank you for the insight. (:
Re. Alone in paradise.
22nd Aug 2019 11:38pm
Alone & sunburned. Terrible!
Your descriptions come across as very professionally written. :-)
Your descriptions come across as very professionally written. :-)
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Re. Alone in paradise.
22nd Aug 2019 11:46pm
Re. Alone in paradise.
15th Sep 2019 10:46pm
Indeed nature’s majesty, like great music is so much more meaningful shared.
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Re: Re. Alone in paradise.
16th Sep 2019 1:21am
Thank you Jazzy one. (;
Perhaps will cross paths on the same beach one day.
Your friend,
Losty
Perhaps will cross paths on the same beach one day.
Your friend,
Losty
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Re: Re. Alone in paradise.
9th Oct 2019 2:48am
I simply love that.
Thanks you Tim for the RL. That is special to me.
Losty
(:
Thanks you Tim for the RL. That is special to me.
Losty
(:
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Re. Alone in paradise.
16th Oct 2019 3:48am
Thank you Tim.
Yes loneliness at times can seem like a strong punch to the gut.
Leaving us with a sore ache and out of breath.
Thanks for the love on this write.
Losty.
Yes loneliness at times can seem like a strong punch to the gut.
Leaving us with a sore ache and out of breath.
Thanks for the love on this write.
Losty.
Re. Alone in paradise.
27th Oct 2019 12:33pm
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27th Oct 2019 2:36pm
Thank you. (;
You want to see me naked, you know where to find me cowboy.
No need for foreplay.
Losty
You want to see me naked, you know where to find me cowboy.
No need for foreplay.
Losty
Re. Alone in paradise.
9th Apr 2020 5:09pm
Even when surrounded by the natural beauty of life around you it is difficult to appreciate it in the absence of someone you love.
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Re: Re. Alone in paradise.
15th Apr 2020 5:14am
Right on.
Preach it, sister.
You’ve hit on next weeks topic of our group.
See you there. (;
Hugs and not drugs!
Losty
Preach it, sister.
You’ve hit on next weeks topic of our group.
See you there. (;
Hugs and not drugs!
Losty
Re. Alone in paradise.
25th Feb 2024 6:23pm
"My footprints leave an imprint on white sand.
It feels like the lonliest place on earth without you."
beautiful descriptions and heart tugging lines, especially at the end.
Great work.
It feels like the lonliest place on earth without you."
beautiful descriptions and heart tugging lines, especially at the end.
Great work.
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