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Tonight's The Night
I am alone in my quiet life
My heart awaits this haunting knife
In my hand the blade still dry
Longs for the fate I can't deny
I've walked this road in the distant past
I want this time to be the last
This tangled web I can't untie
Trapped within my own sordid lie
There is a weight I cannot lift
My heavy heart's been lost adrift
My soul sinks deeper from the sky
Tonight's the night I want to die
* 05/21/2001
Copyright © 2004 JJ Johnson
US Copyright Office Registration: TXu1-162-978
My heart awaits this haunting knife
In my hand the blade still dry
Longs for the fate I can't deny
I've walked this road in the distant past
I want this time to be the last
This tangled web I can't untie
Trapped within my own sordid lie
There is a weight I cannot lift
My heavy heart's been lost adrift
My soul sinks deeper from the sky
Tonight's the night I want to die
* 05/21/2001
Copyright © 2004 JJ Johnson
US Copyright Office Registration: TXu1-162-978
Published 16th Aug 2011
| Edited 6th Nov 2017
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16th Aug 2011 6:41pm
16th Aug 2011 8:22pm
Thank you, and I suspect there is some darkness within you to think this a very nice poem. How interesting... I'm going to have to read you work to examine the inner workings of your mind.
Anonymous
17th Aug 2011 7:05am
Very smooth!
17th Aug 2011 1:45pm
17th Aug 2011 7:41am
Obviously a very dark topic -- what I liked about this poem was the rhyming which came together very nicely. I like to rhyme too sometimes, so I can appreciate it when it's done well.
17th Aug 2011 1:51pm
Thank you, I rhyme a lot. It just comes out that way and I don't fight it. Many people don't like it, but I think it's because rhyming can so often sound sing-songy like a nursery rhyme. I try very hard not to do that. I think I write with some intelligence, well I try to anyway, and I think I put enough of an edge on the words to keep it from being silly or predictable. Thanks for the thoughtful comment.
18th Aug 2011 6:36am
Wow! You truley have a talent in writing. I loved the way it was written. How it rhymed. Well done. :)
18th Aug 2011 12:51pm
Thanks Casey. I appreciate to compliment and glad you like it. Van Gogh was right, art has a way of finding its audience. I think it takes someone who has felt this way to really know the nature of this desire and how it drives the muse in times of feeling alone in a crowded maze.
17th Dec 2011 5:57am
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13th Jan 2012 3:35pm
Would a slip of the knife be any different than a slip of the tongue? Sigmund Freud might say it was no accident. jj
1st May 2012 3:57am
damn...ur right our poems are pretty similiar...but I like yours(: It rhymes...mine was just a sonnet(:
1st May 2012 4:35am
30th Oct 2017 3:07pm
Where have you gone my dear? Wherever have you gone my deeper than dark sweetheart???
JJ
JJ
16th May 2016 5:49pm
I've felt this one all the way to my toes at times. Very beautiful and haunting...
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18th May 2016 8:26pm
Just be careful with the shovel, parts of me are more delicate than others... lol
18th May 2016 8:40pm
If you're going to dig for delicate items, isn't it safer to use your hands?
18th May 2016 10:11pm
