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Sandpaper Tears
It's like a spike through the forehead
& my feathered lashes are not thick enough to shield me from the aftershocks
(it's left me shaken)
To know had I lie bleeding
You would have stepped around the pooling blood
just to save the mess from your shoes
Your eyes pierced me
Though you seemed to stare right through me
(like I was never even nothing)
(to you) I had become a transparent past, replaceable
(but once, you were my world)
Another broken step (misplaced)
on your search for something more
So I struggle to unstitch my questioning lips
But my tongue appears to be severed
Because why should I bother
When you never even cared to say goodbye
& my feathered lashes are not thick enough to shield me from the aftershocks
(it's left me shaken)
To know had I lie bleeding
You would have stepped around the pooling blood
just to save the mess from your shoes
Your eyes pierced me
Though you seemed to stare right through me
(like I was never even nothing)
(to you) I had become a transparent past, replaceable
(but once, you were my world)
Another broken step (misplaced)
on your search for something more
So I struggle to unstitch my questioning lips
But my tongue appears to be severed
Because why should I bother
When you never even cared to say goodbye
Published 4th Dec 2009
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4th Dec 2009 7:44am
4th Dec 2009 10:15am
at me Kandice, great imagery, great concept - but I don't understand your love affair with parentheses. If you are fragile today ignore me!
4th Dec 2009 10:38am
The parentheses are a bit harder to explain. This piece is new, but had the scabs ripped off of old wounds so no worries darlin. I guess the best way to put it would be I use them like a whisper, something in the background or mostly like a narrator. Sometimes trying to make a line suggest more than one thing.
4th Dec 2009 10:49am
I understand totally - altho I wouldn't want them to become a hallmark of yours.
5th Dec 2009 5:39am
Oh wow hon....that's heavy stuff right there. I dig the usage of parenthesis in your writings and remember that you're writing for yourself so just remember that ;)
And yeah....I think we can all relate to the feelings you were describing in Sandpaper tears.
And yeah....I think we can all relate to the feelings you were describing in Sandpaper tears.
11th Jan 2010 4:35am
you're a very talented writer.. I notice you have a lot of "love" related poems.. understandable.. the unending muse.. right right? I often write "love" poems after the relationship has ended so they become angst or dark poems because the love turns to rage and sadness.. where else is there to go.. denial doesn't last long enough.. and acceptance is to blurry when you're still right in the rubble and aftershock of the bomb.. I really like your poems darlin.. keep it up.. cheers!!
