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The Eastern Panhandle
Breathless,
stood atop bones from yesteryear
mountains have crumbled
echoing ear, shifted open field
loose lay the gravel, sand, flower and white pebble
the glass broken fragments shine
sparkling shards to the Sun
voiced
reason, theory and shoestring
grips tread wearing slippers
no purple prism, simply existence
red forever, chambers contain
a language I'll never forget
I see hills in the distance
mounds below this crest
were I the willow
I'd sing with the wind
were I the oak I'd stay
forever stoic, rooted and resolved
but nothing stays tied to me
a trunk made with heartwood
~could~hangs on a vision
all I know right now is distance
a beggars travel
*Written for Jan. Poem of the month...
stood atop bones from yesteryear
mountains have crumbled
echoing ear, shifted open field
loose lay the gravel, sand, flower and white pebble
the glass broken fragments shine
sparkling shards to the Sun
voiced
reason, theory and shoestring
grips tread wearing slippers
no purple prism, simply existence
red forever, chambers contain
a language I'll never forget
I see hills in the distance
mounds below this crest
were I the willow
I'd sing with the wind
were I the oak I'd stay
forever stoic, rooted and resolved
but nothing stays tied to me
a trunk made with heartwood
~could~hangs on a vision
all I know right now is distance
a beggars travel
*Written for Jan. Poem of the month...
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Re: Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 6:11pm
Re. The Eastern Panhandle
Anonymous
16th Dec 2016 5:44pm
Have I told you how beautiful this is? No? Let me start... man, this is beautiful. Lyrically it really got me excited to read poetry today. Yeah. That good.
Just a few bits in the spirit of honest critique:
We're I the willow > just needs to be changed to 'Were I the willow" - also the same on the next line.
Also 'could hangs on a vision' - would it be better to remove the 'could'? that word doesn't seem to make sense.
Thanks for the read :)
Just a few bits in the spirit of honest critique:
We're I the willow > just needs to be changed to 'Were I the willow" - also the same on the next line.
Also 'could hangs on a vision' - would it be better to remove the 'could'? that word doesn't seem to make sense.
Thanks for the read :)

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Re: Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 6:20pm
Deep thanks Missy!!!
It would've been never- that I'd catch that.
I spit things out without 're-visiting.
two- I'm unfortunately on my phone- so automatic word revision takes over without notice- it causes me mucho headaches whilst texting lol- some to an embarrassing extent.
As for cause- partly that is due to my bloody Americanism and two my regional red-neck leanings to my language and it's stabbing point.
I hope that makes sense lol
thank You so Very much for Your Kindness, time and Care-my head has now ballooned!!!
It would've been never- that I'd catch that.
I spit things out without 're-visiting.
two- I'm unfortunately on my phone- so automatic word revision takes over without notice- it causes me mucho headaches whilst texting lol- some to an embarrassing extent.
As for cause- partly that is due to my bloody Americanism and two my regional red-neck leanings to my language and it's stabbing point.
I hope that makes sense lol
thank You so Very much for Your Kindness, time and Care-my head has now ballooned!!!
Re: Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 8:14pm
....and I still missed the second one- lol Damn my patience and autospell
thanks again Missy :)
thanks again Missy :)
Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 6:20pm
Re: Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 6:25pm
You Are Very kind Ahavati!!!
Honoured to make Your RL ..what a gift!!!
Honoured to make Your RL ..what a gift!!!
Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 7:19pm
Soul, mo Chara...
This is one of those poems that continues to haunt my thoughts--prompting me to read it again and again....And i cannot help but feel the poet's poignant, longing for a past, that can never be regained.....and a future that, at the present time, remains just out of reach.....
To be certain, the bristles of your literary paintbrush create a striking array of images within this piece! Thank you for sharing :)
This is one of those poems that continues to haunt my thoughts--prompting me to read it again and again....And i cannot help but feel the poet's poignant, longing for a past, that can never be regained.....and a future that, at the present time, remains just out of reach.....
To be certain, the bristles of your literary paintbrush create a striking array of images within this piece! Thank you for sharing :)
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Re. The Eastern Panhandle
16th Dec 2016 8:19pm
An open book I tend to be DE.
such kind words You gift- thank You Always for visiting and spending precious time!!!
such kind words You gift- thank You Always for visiting and spending precious time!!!
Re. The Eastern Panhandle
Anonymous
18th Dec 2016 3:15pm
I saw everything again as i read this..i know you were not talking about the same exact place but i remember seeing the hills and the mounds and the distance. Remember when i wanted to touch the water, the little creek by the road? and i let you hold my hat so it wouldn't fall...:)
One needs to experience the place in this poem to breathe in with all senses...tis my friend is one of your finest, i always tell you, when you let it flow, it always shines (and you better not fix anything, most often beauty is just as, born as, to be..., just as nature is and just as you are )
One needs to experience the place in this poem to breathe in with all senses...tis my friend is one of your finest, i always tell you, when you let it flow, it always shines (and you better not fix anything, most often beauty is just as, born as, to be..., just as nature is and just as you are )

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Re: Re. The Eastern Panhandle
18th Dec 2016 4:23pm
Re. The Eastern Panhandle
1st Jan 2017 8:28pm
Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
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Re: Re. The Eastern Panhandle
1st Jan 2017 8:31pm
Re. The Eastern Panhandle
Congratulations! This poem, nominated by Ahavati, was voted Second Place Winner in Poem of the Month, February, 2016, competition!
You may view the award here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
Again, Congratulations
You may view the award here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
Again, Congratulations
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