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make a move
They’re all asking what’s coming next
saying “make a move, make a move, make a move”
and I’m standing back from the cliff edge
but I can’t take a run at tomorrow
I can’t think beyond today
But still they’re pushing me closer to falling
telling me “make a move, make a move, make a move”
and I just want to scream “I can’t fucking fly,
so just let me climb down in my own time”
but still they’re telling me
“make a move, make a move, make a move
the world won’t wait for you”
© Indie Adams 2016
saying “make a move, make a move, make a move”
and I’m standing back from the cliff edge
but I can’t take a run at tomorrow
I can’t think beyond today
But still they’re pushing me closer to falling
telling me “make a move, make a move, make a move”
and I just want to scream “I can’t fucking fly,
so just let me climb down in my own time”
but still they’re telling me
“make a move, make a move, make a move
the world won’t wait for you”
© Indie Adams 2016
Published 30th Nov 2016
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I have always been torn between two sayings:
"He who hesitates is lost"
and
"When in doubt, wait."
I asked my father about it over a game of chess once. He said to me, "Do YOU want to do it? Or do OTHERS want you to do it?" At the time I knew it was others, because I was uncertain whether or not I should do it, but was afraid I might be wrong if I didn't listen to them. At what point my father asked, "What's wrong with being wrong? Will you not have then learned to listen to your own judgment? Which is the greater regret? Having listened to yourself or others?" I learned over the course of time I would rather make the gravest of errors than surrender my own judgement to others.
May you learn the same in half the time it took me. :)
Great write, Indie.
"He who hesitates is lost"
and
"When in doubt, wait."
I asked my father about it over a game of chess once. He said to me, "Do YOU want to do it? Or do OTHERS want you to do it?" At the time I knew it was others, because I was uncertain whether or not I should do it, but was afraid I might be wrong if I didn't listen to them. At what point my father asked, "What's wrong with being wrong? Will you not have then learned to listen to your own judgment? Which is the greater regret? Having listened to yourself or others?" I learned over the course of time I would rather make the gravest of errors than surrender my own judgement to others.
May you learn the same in half the time it took me. :)
Great write, Indie.
6th Mar 2017 6:37pm
this - is like looking for gold, and discovering a precious gem underneath your score. thanks for sharing.
30th Nov 2016 10:49pm
1st Dec 2016 12:11pm
If they're all asking what's coming next they should find out for themselves... but in stead they want you to give them an answer!
And they ask me why I get sick and tired of people.
And they ask me why I get sick and tired of people.
2nd Dec 2016 8:44pm
It's a good piece;however, wouldn't you want to add a comma after falling, before telling. It was just something noticed, not sure if you value grammatical advice. All in all, short and interesting; like a passionate passing thought.
6th Mar 2017 6:35pm
Reading Indie always makes me want to write. ....and always makes it easy to.
...thankyou...
...thankyou...
