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Displaced
Sitting here wishing I was a kid again,
Back in the days of little rascal,
When the only problems were girl clubs, cooties and raffles
But now stress is weighing me down,
Drowning me in adult fiascos
Learning to balance the smiles
The struggles being a constant battle
Life is on tackle
I don't know how to break this cycle
Creativity on lock mode
Feening for revival
Frustrated with the strain of my cortex being at maximum
Trifecta of intelligence, ipseity and stamina
Needs....responsibilities...engulf the kindred soul within me
Oh back in the days of senseless liberations
When happiness came from ice cream and playgrounds
Where fear was only a word with no true meaning, no honest feeling
Because they were always engulfed
By the responsible being
If only
I was a kid again
Back in the days of little rascal,
When the only problems were girl clubs, cooties and raffles
But now stress is weighing me down,
Drowning me in adult fiascos
Learning to balance the smiles
The struggles being a constant battle
Life is on tackle
I don't know how to break this cycle
Creativity on lock mode
Feening for revival
Frustrated with the strain of my cortex being at maximum
Trifecta of intelligence, ipseity and stamina
Needs....responsibilities...engulf the kindred soul within me
Oh back in the days of senseless liberations
When happiness came from ice cream and playgrounds
Where fear was only a word with no true meaning, no honest feeling
Because they were always engulfed
By the responsible being
If only
I was a kid again
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Re. Displaced
I feel this way all the time. My cortex is overwhelmed at times also. As one man said--youth is wasted on the young. Had I known what I was in for, I'd have done things differently and with more joy. Nice writing.
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26th Oct 2016 9:11pm
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26th Oct 2016 9:01pm
I feel you on this piece. I wonder the same thing... I want to go back to being a kid when there were not so many problems that we had to worry about. Thanks for sharing. I think we can all relate so much to this piece.
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Re: Re. Displaced
26th Oct 2016 9:21pm
Thank you! And so true! I think all of us as kids were plagued with a certain ignorance that deflects the understanding of when we're told "don't be in a hurry to grow up" 🤔
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26th Oct 2016 9:49pm
Isn't it funny how when we were kids we wanted so bad to grow up and do adult things, now life has turned the tables on us and we would do anything to go back and be kids again. A part of me still feels like a kid and sometimes I catch myself acting like one. Sometimes I wish I could change the world, but mostly I just want to change me...
Great write, really made e think!
JJ
Great write, really made e think!
JJ
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26th Oct 2016 10:39pm
Yes it is so funny! Just like our parents always said one day we'd say they were right. I suppose it fits along with the whole "grass is greener on the other side". In this case
It's life!
It's life!
Re. Displaced
26th Oct 2016 11:05pm
"Frustrated with the strain of my cortex being at maximum"
I know this feeling very well as I am encumbered with and
overburdened by daily.
But the whole story that you have written here strikes a
chord as I also occasionally feel this way.
Good write... Dantalyon
I know this feeling very well as I am encumbered with and
overburdened by daily.
But the whole story that you have written here strikes a
chord as I also occasionally feel this way.
Good write... Dantalyon
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27th Oct 2016 5:32am
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Anonymous
27th Oct 2016 2:17am
"Where fear was only a word with no true meaning, no honest feeling"
Great line! Not always true, but more so than adulthood...when we have true comprehension of what the fear means and where it comes from. I love the rhythm of this. :)
Willow
Great line! Not always true, but more so than adulthood...when we have true comprehension of what the fear means and where it comes from. I love the rhythm of this. :)
Willow
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Re. Displaced
27th Oct 2016 3:26am
Amazing. As we grow up we realize more and more how much responsibility and stress is on our shoulders, so we think back to our childhood. This piece really hits home. Great job!
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27th Oct 2016 2:36pm
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27th Oct 2016 7:10am
Lyrical, you are a powerful writer filled with poignant thought. The passage I most identify with, in this piece, is this:
"Where fear was only a word with no true meaning, no honest feeling
Because they were always engulfed
By the responsible being "
And you taught me a new word, "ipseity." Bravisima bella poeta!
"Where fear was only a word with no true meaning, no honest feeling
Because they were always engulfed
By the responsible being "
And you taught me a new word, "ipseity." Bravisima bella poeta!
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27th Oct 2016 2:41pm
Yes luv! Thank you for identifying! I identify with that line intensity. I was the child whose fears were washed away by my protector and now it is I who must carry others fears 😊 I dearly appreciate your compliments
Re. Displaced
27th Oct 2016 1:23pm
It's like you are sitting out on your porch watching the neighborhood and just musing over days gone by. I love your word use. Great write.
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27th Oct 2016 2:37pm
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