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& i cried
you left me that day
alone in a motel room
with just the dust motes
raining on my naked skin
felt dirty
like I would never be clean again
used up
a private urinal
to piss your rage into
hate sex
is what i'm good for
filthy little secret
that you keep tucked
under your respectable veneer
you reach for me
when cruelty is on your mind
Sadistic in nature
toyed with my emotions
then cast me aside
with the wadded cum rags
I take all the blame
for being a whore
lips bruised
pussy fucked dry
your lonely little Lolita
passion stirred
the dust settled
and I knew I was alone
Published 2nd Oct 2016
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You write through characters, as I do ....
It's why you're writing is so sincere in elegant mayhem ....
You take chances and you score
Good writers do this !!!
Best part is you're not afraid
You're fierce and loyal to your fans
Just when I think you've gone over the edge, you break off another piece and create something uncomfortable and jagged in our heartstrings
Bravo Brenda
P.S. You really brought me in with the line "under your respectable veneer"
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xxoo
It's why you're writing is so sincere in elegant mayhem ....
You take chances and you score
Good writers do this !!!
Best part is you're not afraid
You're fierce and loyal to your fans
Just when I think you've gone over the edge, you break off another piece and create something uncomfortable and jagged in our heartstrings
Bravo Brenda
P.S. You really brought me in with the line "under your respectable veneer"
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xxoo
2nd Oct 2016 2:06pm
2nd Oct 2016 4:38pm
Oh dear Crim,
Such a painful write! The loneliness is tangible...
You're so brave... and I admire you for that!
Love, Duende
Such a painful write! The loneliness is tangible...
You're so brave... and I admire you for that!
Love, Duende
2nd Oct 2016 5:33pm
thank you lovely Duende it was partly fiction I have to admit kind of an atmospheric write..
love you lady..
xo Brenda
love you lady..
xo Brenda
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 9:03pm
This is genuine and almost too surreal for many ... I don`t know where you mind`s been lately, my Queen, but you sure are getting down with your ink particularly in poems about love ... in awe ... love you, my Lady ... ~Devlin.
3rd Oct 2016 00:58am
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 10:11pm
Awe Crim.......words leave me speechless reading this......imagery and emotions I feel are amazing.......you're such a wonderful talent and soul......purple luv & hugs xo :)
3rd Oct 2016 00:59am
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 10:57pm
Your words here paint a very vivid canvas...tragic and heart wrenching...
3rd Oct 2016 1:00am
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 11:46pm
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3rd Oct 2016 1:00am
3rd Oct 2016 4:04am
3rd Oct 2016 4:49am
3rd Oct 2016 9:13am
how do we ever find our way out of those blue motel rooms?
& the working girls who never knew my name...
weeping poetry, Crim...
& the working girls who never knew my name...
weeping poetry, Crim...
3rd Oct 2016 10:09am
I don't know John they make for some of the most colorful poetry..
thank you for feeling this..
love Crim
thank you for feeling this..
love Crim
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2016 10:14am
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3rd Oct 2016 10:21am
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2016 2:14pm
Love, used, and left in heartbreak.
Very visual, and can take on so many different meanings.
Brilliant ink, just as you do it Crim 💓
Very visual, and can take on so many different meanings.
Brilliant ink, just as you do it Crim 💓
6th Oct 2016 5:58pm
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2016 8:03pm
I want you to know how much you touch my heart . You are the loveliest badass, I have had the privilege of reading. Malady Brenda, thank you.
✨Always Peace Trish .... Always
✨Always Peace Trish .... Always
6th Oct 2016 5:59pm
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2016 9:49pm
WOW!! Brenda.. i'm just blown away by your brilliance.. love you!!
Dave
Dave
6th Oct 2016 6:00pm
4th Oct 2016 9:56pm
Heartbreaking lines Crim. The raw details add up to pain and loneliness. Dry your eyes, Lady. This one's grim but deeply touching.
6th Oct 2016 6:01pm
6th Oct 2016 11:33pm
Brenda this is how you slay the demons... your pen is extremely sharp and fine...yes fine as you convey the story with such depth and emotions yet in so few words! evocative is the word here!
6th Oct 2016 11:42pm
