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My Saudade
the pendulum swings
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my Anarchist Artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion, destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
I suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
when solitude
submerges
me and
nothing
matters
anymore
for you, my Love
you stripped me bare
and forced me to wear
nothing but vulnerability
for you and only you
I got down on all fours
while I begged for more
the pendulum swings
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my Master, my Rebel
my heaven, my hell
my de Sade
my Saudade
~Your Elf~
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aIknDwrHkjY
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my Anarchist Artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion, destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
I suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
when solitude
submerges
me and
nothing
matters
anymore
for you, my Love
you stripped me bare
and forced me to wear
nothing but vulnerability
for you and only you
I got down on all fours
while I begged for more
the pendulum swings
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my Master, my Rebel
my heaven, my hell
my de Sade
my Saudade
~Your Elf~
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aIknDwrHkjY
Published 21st Sep 2016
| Edited 24th Apr 2017
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2016 8:09pm
Your conflict–the yearning and gathering strength to resist–really comes through in this piece. It's so difficult to break free of something, someone we want that is more harm than good when the good feels so. damn. good. No idea what the words of the song are, but the feeling of it is a strong accompaniment.
Thank you so much mariekeys for seeing the conflict... my conflict...
It's so difficult to break free of something, someone we want that is more harm than good when the good feels so. damn. good. > exactly that!!!
Ahh, the song... the emotions it evoked without knowing what she's singing about, started this poem!
I looked up the translation after finishing the poem and it was spot on!
The title I already knew: My Diabolical Angel
I appreciate your comments so much :-)
It's so difficult to break free of something, someone we want that is more harm than good when the good feels so. damn. good. > exactly that!!!
Ahh, the song... the emotions it evoked without knowing what she's singing about, started this poem!
I looked up the translation after finishing the poem and it was spot on!
The title I already knew: My Diabolical Angel
I appreciate your comments so much :-)
Anonymous
21st Sep 2016 8:18pm
There is nothing quite like this feeling. That consumption that you hate to love.
The forbidden and toxic is the very thing that brings forth such a euphoria that we only know to crave more.
You captured every portion of this perfectly.
Brilliant ink 💓
The forbidden and toxic is the very thing that brings forth such a euphoria that we only know to crave more.
You captured every portion of this perfectly.
Brilliant ink 💓
Thank you so much lovely Heart!
Well... it took me a very long time to be able to write this poem!
It's not easy to capture such complex and contradictory feelings in one poem,
so I'm grateful to hear you think I did this perfectly :-)
Well... it took me a very long time to be able to write this poem!
It's not easy to capture such complex and contradictory feelings in one poem,
so I'm grateful to hear you think I did this perfectly :-)
21st Sep 2016 8:21pm
lovely Duende all consuming passion that you could just get lost in I know this feeling well..
beautiful write..
love Crim
beautiful write..
love Crim
21st Sep 2016 8:35pm
Thank you so much, dear Crim!
I think many of us know this all consuming passion!
It's easy to get lost and hard to break free...
Love, Duende
I think many of us know this all consuming passion!
It's easy to get lost and hard to break free...
Love, Duende
"........sometimes words flow like blood upon my skin
warm and red resurrecting your spirit inside my soul
I feel it's melancholy angst and pain
For you, I cry tears in the rain, Musically Mr M "
"une tache sombre sur le soleil "
a beautiful treatment of the feeling of melancholy found in longing for something not good for us but oh how good it is to us. ("Evil is my angel too....") Thank you for this beautifully dark poem this rainy Carolina day.
"I cut myself today to see if I can feel- I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real".....Trent Reznor
warm and red resurrecting your spirit inside my soul
I feel it's melancholy angst and pain
For you, I cry tears in the rain, Musically Mr M "
"une tache sombre sur le soleil "
a beautiful treatment of the feeling of melancholy found in longing for something not good for us but oh how good it is to us. ("Evil is my angel too....") Thank you for this beautifully dark poem this rainy Carolina day.
"I cut myself today to see if I can feel- I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real".....Trent Reznor
Thank you so much for your deeply moving comment!
I feel it's melancholy angst and pain
For you, I cry tears in the rain > that made me tear up again...
I'm grateful you picked up the Saudade in this poem, a feeling that is as important as Duende!
Duende and Saudade > Flamenco and Fado > passion and pain > both part of me...
Ahh, the quote... I'm starting to believe there is something like emotional masochism as well, I think my next poem will reveal a bit more (resurrection being a main theme)
I feel it's melancholy angst and pain
For you, I cry tears in the rain > that made me tear up again...
I'm grateful you picked up the Saudade in this poem, a feeling that is as important as Duende!
Duende and Saudade > Flamenco and Fado > passion and pain > both part of me...
Ahh, the quote... I'm starting to believe there is something like emotional masochism as well, I think my next poem will reveal a bit more (resurrection being a main theme)
I love, love, love this..
no other words..
..ah those damn
pendulum, just can't
help it..
Nostalgia hinged her
claws within me.
Such melancholic beauty
-Howlings
no other words..
..ah those damn
pendulum, just can't
help it..
Nostalgia hinged her
claws within me.
Such melancholic beauty
-Howlings
22nd Sep 2016 9:45am
Thank you so much, Howlings!
So glad to hear you could feel this one and that you love it so much!
Your comments are treasured and yes... that damn pendulum!
So glad to hear you could feel this one and that you love it so much!
Your comments are treasured and yes... that damn pendulum!
22nd Sep 2016 7:32am
Dear DC, thank you so much! Glad to hear you could feel it...
Perfection... it took me a long time to write this one before the perfectionist in me was satisfied...
Perfection... it took me a long time to write this one before the perfectionist in me was satisfied...
22nd Sep 2016 10:49am
Passion and pain,two of our biggest weaknesses.
I felt the beauty in this intense piece,very nice....
I felt the beauty in this intense piece,very nice....
22nd Sep 2016 11:34am
Thank you so much, Kasai!
There's a thin line between passion and destruction (or pain)
I'm grateful you could feel the intense emotions which I tried to describe!
There's a thin line between passion and destruction (or pain)
I'm grateful you could feel the intense emotions which I tried to describe!
22nd Sep 2016 1:48pm
It's like everything in life...a dark, a light, a wrong, a right... That beautiful ecstasy, that horrendous pain... Yea yea I felt this this so deeply my beauty...
22nd Sep 2016 5:24pm
Thank you so much, sweet Poet!
You are right, though I would like to scip the horrendous pain... just a bit of bittersweet if that's not too much to ask ;-)
You are right, though I would like to scip the horrendous pain... just a bit of bittersweet if that's not too much to ask ;-)
3rd Oct 2016 8:46am
yes, Saudade; not to be named, not to be resisted.
there are poems & emotions that shatter us...
there are poems & emotions that shatter us...
4th Oct 2016 1:30pm
Thank you so much for your comment!
I remember you left a comment on my 'Saudade' as well :-)
I agree... emotions and poems can shatter us...
I remember you left a comment on my 'Saudade' as well :-)
I agree... emotions and poems can shatter us...
Anonymous
3rd Nov 2016 3:47pm
I have to agree with those above
but i will say that this brought me
to shivers and tears,
-Signed
the other little elf
but i will say that this brought me
to shivers and tears,
-Signed
the other little elf
3rd Nov 2016 4:33pm
Thank you so much for your comment!
Your work caused the same reaction with me...
I really appreciate your visit and words!
We elves are vulnerable...
Your work caused the same reaction with me...
I really appreciate your visit and words!
We elves are vulnerable...
