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Avalanche
smooth to my touch
is her peachy skin
perfumed with
honeysuckle
silky hums
entice me
soft thighs
invite me in
my mind gets
lost in longings
sliding around in
circling seduction
i sustain her on
the edge of
eruption
sighs
with
sapphire
eyes flaming
nostrils flaring
her breathing
shifts from
volatile
to violent
all that she
was is gone
she’s just
roars
and
moans
guided by
thunders her
core morphed
into vulvanic
avalanches
is her peachy skin
perfumed with
honeysuckle
silky hums
entice me
soft thighs
invite me in
my mind gets
lost in longings
sliding around in
circling seduction
i sustain her on
the edge of
eruption
sighs
with
sapphire
eyes flaming
nostrils flaring
her breathing
shifts from
volatile
to violent
all that she
was is gone
she’s just
roars
and
moans
guided by
thunders her
core morphed
into vulvanic
avalanches
Published 11th Sep 2016
| Edited 3rd Dec 2024
Author's Note
Melissa Ferricks - Drive.
https://youtu.be/Misx30fMOzg
https://youtu.be/Misx30fMOzg
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Anonymous
11th Sep 2016 7:46pm
This is such a breathtaking sensual write 💓
So visual. The touches, sounds and movements can be felt deeply.
Very steamy ink 💓
So visual. The touches, sounds and movements can be felt deeply.
Very steamy ink 💓
Thank you so much, lovely Heart!
You always make me smile with your visits :-)
Glad to hear you could feel this one deeply and found it to be steamy!
You always make me smile with your visits :-)
Glad to hear you could feel this one deeply and found it to be steamy!
Anonymous
11th Sep 2016 8:04pm
Ooh, `vulvanic`. . .another thing or word we have in common;). . .but hey, Beautiful, this piece is steaming and stunning; leaves much to ponder on. . .~xo, Devlin.
12th Sep 2016 1:36am
Thank you so much, Lady Devlin!
Seriously? You used that word? Here I was thinking I came up with something unique, but hey... if I could name someone who had the same idea it would be you ;-)
Seriously? You used that word? Here I was thinking I came up with something unique, but hey... if I could name someone who had the same idea it would be you ;-)
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Nov 2018 00:49am
11th Sep 2016 9:06pm
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Nailed her? That is quite the compliment, thank you so much!
Ehm... no pruning with this one? Are you oké? ;-)
And yes... that is one hell of a song...
Ehm... no pruning with this one? Are you oké? ;-)
And yes... that is one hell of a song...
11th Sep 2016 11:42pm
Anonymous
12th Sep 2016 3:19am
This is a sexy little beast of a poem! The pacing and phrasing builds a sense of anticipation that pays off nicely. Vulvanic—now that's a fun word.
That song, that song, that song... oh my melolagnia! Yeah, it just made my playlist. ;-)
That song, that song, that song... oh my melolagnia! Yeah, it just made my playlist. ;-)
Ahhh... sexy little beast of a poem! You made me smile big time :-D
Glad to hear the song made your playlist and yeah... that damn melolagnia ;-)
Thank you so much, your comments are treasured!
P.S. I knew you would mention vulvanic ;-)
Glad to hear the song made your playlist and yeah... that damn melolagnia ;-)
Thank you so much, your comments are treasured!
P.S. I knew you would mention vulvanic ;-)
12th Sep 2016 6:29am
Your words are seductively elegant,Duende
You always manage to make it sensual and beautiful....
You always manage to make it sensual and beautiful....
You left me a bit speechless... seductively elegant?
That's a huge compliment... thank you so much, Kasai!
That's a huge compliment... thank you so much, Kasai!
12th Sep 2016 7:38am
12th Sep 2016 7:50am
You wish ;-)
Thanks for your wonderful comment
Always nice to see you on my page...
Thanks for your wonderful comment
Always nice to see you on my page...
12th Sep 2016 10:34am
Thank you so much, I really appreciate your visits!
I had doubts about 'sighs' but based on your comment I decided it should stay :-)
I had doubts about 'sighs' but based on your comment I decided it should stay :-)
12th Sep 2016 1:02pm
Thank you, lovely Crim!
Sizzling hot erotica, that's an amazing compliment!
Love, Duende
Sizzling hot erotica, that's an amazing compliment!
Love, Duende
Anonymous
13th Sep 2016 00:16am
"my mind gets
lost in longings
sliding around in
circling seduction
I sustain her on
the edge of
eruption
sighs
with
sapphire
eyes flaming
nostrils flaring
her breathing
shifts from
volatile
to violent "
Duende..
this...is...ultra-sensual...
there's so much anticipation
reeking through this vibe..
avalanche indeed!!
lost in longings
sliding around in
circling seduction
I sustain her on
the edge of
eruption
sighs
with
sapphire
eyes flaming
nostrils flaring
her breathing
shifts from
volatile
to violent "
Duende..
this...is...ultra-sensual...
there's so much anticipation
reeking through this vibe..
avalanche indeed!!
13th Sep 2016 4:13am
Thank you so much, Naajir!
Ultra-sensual... that's a huge compliment!
I really appreciate your visits :-)
Ultra-sensual... that's a huge compliment!
I really appreciate your visits :-)
Anonymous
13th Sep 2016 2:55am
This is one incredibly Sultry piece! Wow! I am in awe!
Willow
Willow
13th Sep 2016 4:26am
Thank you so much!
I really appreciate your comment!
Had to look up Sultry (my vocabulary increases by the day) but... Wow!!!
I really appreciate your comment!
Had to look up Sultry (my vocabulary increases by the day) but... Wow!!!
Anonymous
14th Sep 2016 2:04am
Awesome! I'm happy to have shared a word with you! ;)
13th Sep 2016 10:12am
Hullo
very easy to read, your lines stayed focused, nice subtle ryhme made it more the pleasure
very refreshing angle
very easy to read, your lines stayed focused, nice subtle ryhme made it more the pleasure
very refreshing angle
13th Sep 2016 3:17pm
Thank you so much!
I feel honored to get a compliment from someone with so many trophies!
Great to hear that you thought my lines stayed focus, that's a challenge for me ;-)
I feel honored to get a compliment from someone with so many trophies!
Great to hear that you thought my lines stayed focus, that's a challenge for me ;-)
15th Sep 2016 3:10am
Good erotic writing should leave the reader in a euphoric state of arousal. It's imagery should create a transference into the action of words and images......stimulating.
Your words do deeply stimulate....male, female or other. I mean that in the most complimentary way 👏
Your words do deeply stimulate....male, female or other. I mean that in the most complimentary way 👏
15th Sep 2016 5:32am
Thank you so much!
I agree with you that erotica should be stimlating.... allowing the reader to feel and see it!
That you find my words to be deeply stimulating is an amazing compliment :-)
I truly appreciate your comment!
I agree with you that erotica should be stimlating.... allowing the reader to feel and see it!
That you find my words to be deeply stimulating is an amazing compliment :-)
I truly appreciate your comment!
28th Oct 2016 7:19pm
From now on, if I want to read anything erotic, I know who to cum to. Your writing is admirable.
