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Ghost town of my screams
My screams are loose
And I've been chasing them
Through an abandoned ghost town
Which has no name
They reverberate pain
Bouncing madly from here to there
A shadow among the fading ghosts
Blending in among the rot
Nothing else lives here
Nothing that can be called living
Only phantom gunshots and jagged
Bullet ridden remnants of splintered wood
I must stop searching
This is the perfect place for
Unwanted screams to claim sanctuary
Among the boneyard of rubble and ruin
I chose to set them free
So my soul can be still once more
But they will come back to me one day
And when they do, I'll run far, far away
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Re. Ghost town of my screams
4th Sep 2016 7:13am
it's a desolate tale, Kas,
maybe those ghostly screams will find peace among the ruins;
if not, then maybe there's no place to hide...
maybe those ghostly screams will find peace among the ruins;
if not, then maybe there's no place to hide...
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Re: Re. Ghost town of my screams
4th Sep 2016 7:37am
A very mysterious thought,John,
Always love to see you visit with your thoughtful words...
Always love to see you visit with your thoughtful words...
Re. Ghost town of my screams
4th Sep 2016 7:52am
That 'town' sounds very desolate for sure, n' I don't think anyone
would wanna get stuck passin thru it! hopefully, you will discover a much happier town soon... :)
would wanna get stuck passin thru it! hopefully, you will discover a much happier town soon... :)
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4th Sep 2016 7:57am
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Re. Ghost town of my screams
8th Sep 2016 8:46am
Hullo
very nice, you have a knack for imagery and weave a good flow therein
nothing massively important. couple of instances which may be over-imaged " Through an abandoned ghost town " ghost town may already imply the place is abandoned
that said, it's not a weak link or poem spoiler. the advice is more for the future writes.
entirely decent offering, lady *hat tip* I think you have the potential to make a real impact with your thoughts
great stuff, keep shinnin'
very nice, you have a knack for imagery and weave a good flow therein
nothing massively important. couple of instances which may be over-imaged " Through an abandoned ghost town " ghost town may already imply the place is abandoned
that said, it's not a weak link or poem spoiler. the advice is more for the future writes.
entirely decent offering, lady *hat tip* I think you have the potential to make a real impact with your thoughts
great stuff, keep shinnin'
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Re: Re. Ghost town of my screams
8th Sep 2016 9:25am
Yes,I see what you mean,of course a ghost town would be abandoned. I appreciate the helpful tip.
Such a kind compliment,thanks for taking the time to stop in and share your thoughts.....
Such a kind compliment,thanks for taking the time to stop in and share your thoughts.....