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Waiting for the thunder.
The sun is brighter now than yesterday
the gentle aspen casting darker shadows
leaves dancing the rhythm of the breeze
as Phoebus rises to his noontime hour
brighter yet, shadows deepen beneath
the buzzing Linden as bees forage nectar
ants farm aphids, honeydew and sweetness
Welcome shade. shadows deepen as the
evening sun burns from a cloudless sky
angry that day is ended, his heat unwanted.
Reprise tomorrow,from the east he comes
bright again, dark shadows to cool
the tired herd beneath the Linden tree
waiting the thunder that will surely come.
the gentle aspen casting darker shadows
leaves dancing the rhythm of the breeze
as Phoebus rises to his noontime hour
brighter yet, shadows deepen beneath
the buzzing Linden as bees forage nectar
ants farm aphids, honeydew and sweetness
Welcome shade. shadows deepen as the
evening sun burns from a cloudless sky
angry that day is ended, his heat unwanted.
Reprise tomorrow,from the east he comes
bright again, dark shadows to cool
the tired herd beneath the Linden tree
waiting the thunder that will surely come.
Published 29th Aug 2016
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I like the pastoral effect of linden and aspen - the scansion is a little inconsistent - but maybe that matches the anticipated rolls of thunder
29th Aug 2016 7:29pm
30th Aug 2016 8:37am
Lovely work Kexby. My favorite lines are where you say,
Welcome shade. shadows deepen as the
evening sun burns from a cloudless sky
angry that day is ended, his heat unwanted.
Your instrument is in fine form. Namaste.
Welcome shade. shadows deepen as the
evening sun burns from a cloudless sky
angry that day is ended, his heat unwanted.
Your instrument is in fine form. Namaste.
30th Aug 2016 10:44am
A few days before I wrote this I drove into the glare of the setting sun which was blinding (and dangerous for drivers) hence the lines . . . .'evening sun burns from a cloudless sky, angry that day is ended his heat unwanted' Thanks for your comments.
