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Hollow
Im hollow, so hollow
i'm carved out inside
This sorrow, sweet sorrow
has shattered the light
I'm dreaming, but dreaming
erases the pain
My true lord and master
implores me to stay
The burning, the burning
consumes what I saw
We're twisting and turning
He's bleeding me raw
The fire, soft fire
Destroys with a spark
His passion is crimson
His touch is so dark
I'm weary, so weary
I'm drunken and glazed
The strongest of dogs
has taught me his ways
Speak gently, so gently
The fire is bright
I came but he conquered
I've fallen tonight
i'm carved out inside
This sorrow, sweet sorrow
has shattered the light
I'm dreaming, but dreaming
erases the pain
My true lord and master
implores me to stay
The burning, the burning
consumes what I saw
We're twisting and turning
He's bleeding me raw
The fire, soft fire
Destroys with a spark
His passion is crimson
His touch is so dark
I'm weary, so weary
I'm drunken and glazed
The strongest of dogs
has taught me his ways
Speak gently, so gently
The fire is bright
I came but he conquered
I've fallen tonight
Published 20th Jul 2011
| Edited 18th Sep 2012
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20th Jul 2011 11:24am
21st Jul 2011 4:14am
Slipping Away is quite suitable. Thank you so much, it finally has a title. <3
21st Jul 2011 6:38am
Anonymous
21st Jul 2011 10:23am
Epically melodious. Loved it!
22nd Jul 2012 2:21am
I came across this when I clicked on random poem. Otherwise, I'm sure I wouldn't have read it solely because of it lacking a title. You've had a suggestion, but haven't made any changes. I don't know if that's because you haven't had the time or completely forgotten about it. Anyway, I'd like to suggest you simply title it "Hollow." Just a suggestion. Either way, its a good write.
