Timelanes

an astute observation indeed..we are but objects on a conveyor belt that's time, all we can do is change lanes but not the road...loved it!

Very glad you liked it.  i wrote this just now, it's been a long time coming

Hullo and welcome  

its a hard one to critique. I like that it's upbeat,  or at the very least you were upbeat while writing it. could probably use a couple of commas  ..one anway after still  

the read is nice, and it flows rather well. and you've ended it pretty good too.  

I liked that it was easy to read, but delving into your thoughts in the first stana  proved a little confusing. nothing critical though. so well done  

all in,  good stuff

Thank you lepperochan for your honest appraisal, i do like that.  
There is no comma after still though, it refers to time being still  
as we move upon it.  Also i intentionally skip periods and commas
when it suits my form.

ahh, ok the still makes sense right enough. thanks for pointing it out. yeah, for the most part I skip punctation as much as possible unless I need a pause here and there

Love... agree with KDAmB... lanes we may change but the direction the same :)

Appreciate reading that from you IrrationalRhymer

Changing lanes keeps it fresh. I like the artwork used here too.

Thanks so much, glad you like the artwork