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Loneliness had gripped my core
Thought I’d be looking forever more
I looked and then I looked some more
I had a list of such and such
A smile, a kiss, a gentle touch
It’s not as if I wanted much
But;
She’d have to be pretty
And of course very witty
Occasionally dizzy
She had to have beauty
Without being snooty
A real cutie
She must be gentle and kind
With an intelligent mind
A one of a kind
Must be classy
Never brassy
And just a little bit sassy
Long blonde hair
Looks good in evening wear
Beachwear, anywhere
Feminine and demure
Confident and sure
Thoughts not always pure
To make my heart go boom
To make my engine go zoom
Being a devil in the bedroom
Somebody to increase my heart rate
To make my pulse pulsate
I am looking for my soul mate
Then I had a breakthrough
Nothing left for me to do
Because I found all of this in you
Thought I’d be looking forever more
I looked and then I looked some more
I had a list of such and such
A smile, a kiss, a gentle touch
It’s not as if I wanted much
But;
She’d have to be pretty
And of course very witty
Occasionally dizzy
She had to have beauty
Without being snooty
A real cutie
She must be gentle and kind
With an intelligent mind
A one of a kind
Must be classy
Never brassy
And just a little bit sassy
Long blonde hair
Looks good in evening wear
Beachwear, anywhere
Feminine and demure
Confident and sure
Thoughts not always pure
To make my heart go boom
To make my engine go zoom
Being a devil in the bedroom
Somebody to increase my heart rate
To make my pulse pulsate
I am looking for my soul mate
Then I had a breakthrough
Nothing left for me to do
Because I found all of this in you
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Re. YOU
15th Apr 2016 9:45pm
what a beautiful write David putting a big smile on my face with it's moving sentiments..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 2:57pm
thank you so much it always means more when a poet you respect makes such positive comments :-)
Ty,Ty, Ty :-)
Ty,Ty, Ty :-)
Re. YOU
15th Apr 2016 10:09pm
This is sweet enough to be in a Valentine's day card. Print them out and put them up for sale!
A fun read and doesn't everyone want to find their dream love!
JJ
A fun read and doesn't everyone want to find their dream love!
JJ
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Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 2:59pm
Sometimes I just can't help it - some sweetness escapes :-)
Thank you for such a positive response to something unusual for me :-)
Thank you for such a positive response to something unusual for me :-)
Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 7:33pm
You have to be careful ith he sweetener, it sneaks out and stains the armpits of your favorit shirt when you least expect it. Then everyone knows it happened if you wave at anybody...
J
J
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Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 8:01pm
Re. YOU
16th Apr 2016 00:44am
Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 3:01pm
Yeah she's massaging my ego, but only because I made her dinner and bought her some wine :-)
the special ones are hard to find - thank fuck she found me :-)
the special ones are hard to find - thank fuck she found me :-)
Re. YOU
16th Apr 2016 1:54am
Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 3:02pm
ty - a special comment from a special poet that's what brings me warm smiles :-)
Re: Re. YOU
19th Apr 2016 11:45pm
You are too kind, honored to receive such nice words, very glad to return the smile.
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Re. YOU
Glad you found her David because I was out of the running when you said "she'd have to be pretty'...I'm pretty damn irresistable but I wouldn't call myself pretty...:)
I enjoyed the read :)
I enjoyed the read :)
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Re: Re. YOU
17th Apr 2016 3:09pm
I think to fully understand this poem you have to be inside my head :-)
I do not subscribe to convention, never have - terms like beauty, lovely and pretty is not as shallow as is the norm - I have always sought the whole package - you can be a supermodel and yet still be ugly, you can be quazimodo and still be pretty - there is so much more than looks (damn it I need to write a poem about this :-))
I suspect you are pretty, beautiful even - you can tell such a lot from the way someone writes so don't put yourself down :-)
I do not subscribe to convention, never have - terms like beauty, lovely and pretty is not as shallow as is the norm - I have always sought the whole package - you can be a supermodel and yet still be ugly, you can be quazimodo and still be pretty - there is so much more than looks (damn it I need to write a poem about this :-))
I suspect you are pretty, beautiful even - you can tell such a lot from the way someone writes so don't put yourself down :-)
Re: Re. YOU
18th Apr 2016 11:30pm
There's no putting myself down David as I'm very comfortable in my skin and with my age :)
A younger man once told me that is what made me sexy...nice to know... :)
It is sad how people subscribe to what society says is beautiful...they in turn miss out on so so much...am pleased you feel the same way
A younger man once told me that is what made me sexy...nice to know... :)
It is sad how people subscribe to what society says is beautiful...they in turn miss out on so so much...am pleased you feel the same way
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Re. YOU
3rd May 2016 1:03am
Yay feelgood poetry, i like this very much.
"I had a list of such and such " excellent line.
You write well
"I had a list of such and such " excellent line.
You write well
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Re: Re. YOU
3rd May 2016 1:12am
why thank you - you write well too - and that's not me just blowing smoke - you are really good :-)