one cut too many

wow. Great! I love it.
Please dont kill yourself though.

Using repetition is fine but I think in this case, those 4 repeated words need to tell a story all by themselves.  There needs to be some kind of progression with those words otherwise it looks like you just flipped through a dictionary and chose 4 random words to repeat that are somewhat related to the topic.  I guess "cutting" and "dead" are okay, but the middle two are not as powerful (that's not to say that the first and last can't be more powerful).

Choose your words carefully.

There isn't really anything for me to get hold of in this poem.  You do lots of telling but not much showing, so I don't really feel anything while reading it.

Sorry if you feel I'm being too harsh. The commenting preference states honest feedback and critique so that's what I'm doing.  You can choose to use it however you wish.

Yes I agree, I am a stickler for details...This poem just leaves me wanting...I need more meat with my potatoes!

i understand what you mean so i aim to improve on this poem :) thank you for your advice DB x

Really good
I can sadly really relate

I'm a recovering addict and I hope to conquer this addiction through poetry...so far so good but I still struggle at times x