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The Waife
Her tits
like camouflaged
toy soldiers
spread accross
a bedroom floor
between lego
and trains
You know they're there
magnificent
to play with
Her ring
hides
stealthfully
in an old
hand carved
jewellery box
you'd never open
Fear in the music
waking
the entire
village
when the
princess ballerina
starts
whirling
I 'spose the
real question
is
can you do this?
can you make her
orgasm;
but keep her
from screaming?
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Published 4th Feb 2016
| Edited 5th Feb 2016
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4th Feb 2016 10:27am
You conjure up some wonderful images and thoughts with this Alistair. Lego indeed? You ever stand on that stuff with bare feet when exiting your child's room? You've just got the little bugger to sleep and that happens causing you to yelp with pain! You wake the family if not the whole village! See what thoughts you conjure? As for orgasms well we'll discuss that some other time. ;-) Loved it mate.
19th Feb 2016 10:11am
I am soo glad the imagery comes through, I have been working on trying to create dynamic images with as few words as I possibly can. So your comment is a gem of a compliment, thank you so much!
Best wishes Mr. Cat ;)
Best wishes Mr. Cat ;)
Anonymous
4th Feb 2016 1:30pm
L2 - that supposed to be camouflaged?
There's a certain darkness in this I love, and it's not a stereotypical darkness. More an analytical darkness of a situation, and I really enjoy that about it.
The question that hangs at the end is glorious. Like saying can you get what you want without consequence, a thought tactfully echoed by the image of the ring hidden in a box. I do love some well placed symmetry.
Good stuff, Al. Good stuff indeed.
There's a certain darkness in this I love, and it's not a stereotypical darkness. More an analytical darkness of a situation, and I really enjoy that about it.
The question that hangs at the end is glorious. Like saying can you get what you want without consequence, a thought tactfully echoed by the image of the ring hidden in a box. I do love some well placed symmetry.
Good stuff, Al. Good stuff indeed.
19th Feb 2016 10:13am
L2 - Indeed you were correct and I was wrong...
Thank You so much for the edit, babe.
The darkness, I have found is what brings my best writes out, don't know quite how it works, but it works!
Thank you for your compliment and love
I do love the input you give dearly
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Thank You so much for the edit, babe.
The darkness, I have found is what brings my best writes out, don't know quite how it works, but it works!
Thank you for your compliment and love
I do love the input you give dearly
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4th Feb 2016 6:51pm
naught to over'analyze....'to be, or not to be...."
daring one's own
p r o
p o s i t i on -
daring one's own
p r o
p o s i t i on -
19th Feb 2016 10:14am
5th Feb 2016 6:36am
Where have you been!
. . and this is a great
come back share...
which has me lingering
if whether or not you
were able to shush her
moans..
hmm.....
-Howlings
. . and this is a great
come back share...
which has me lingering
if whether or not you
were able to shush her
moans..
hmm.....
-Howlings
19th Feb 2016 10:16am
Oh Miss Howlings
How I love the wonderful things you say.
You most welcome to come test,
if I shush sufficiently
or not
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How I love the wonderful things you say.
You most welcome to come test,
if I shush sufficiently
or not
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6th Mar 2016 6:12am
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