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Too Worn Thin to Begin Again
(Written for the Competition "Failed Love")
A muse
(No longer)
Amused
By frantic
Late night
“Romantic”
Delusion
(Perhaps
misnomered
“love”)...
Confusion
Ensuing;
Soul mate
Shoe shopping
For a better fit
(Match)
Profile pic
Up(dated)
Legit;
While I sit
On the shelf
Hands tucked deep
In anticipation,
Heart waiting
To beat! beat! beat!
Or be beaten
And all I dare
Is stare;
Glaring at my feet
In defeat
A muse
(No longer)
Amused
By frantic
Late night
“Romantic”
Delusion
(Perhaps
misnomered
“love”)...
Confusion
Ensuing;
Soul mate
Shoe shopping
For a better fit
(Match)
Profile pic
Up(dated)
Legit;
While I sit
On the shelf
Hands tucked deep
In anticipation,
Heart waiting
To beat! beat! beat!
Or be beaten
And all I dare
Is stare;
Glaring at my feet
In defeat
Published 19th Jan 2016
| Edited 20th Jan 2016
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19th Jan 2016 7:00pm
this reads like one of those deep, shuddering sighs exhaled after a long bout of crying <~ mebbe its just me doing that though
poignant write, sammy
best of luck in the comp
xo
poignant write, sammy
best of luck in the comp
xo
20th Jan 2016 5:12pm
I like that you got that out of it. It is probably pretty accurate. I was just reminiscing on the feelings from experiencing this kind of thing over and over and over...hahaha
Thanks dear Katja.
Thanks dear Katja.
19th Jan 2016 10:42pm
I love everything about this. Excellent write!
Good luck in the competition! 😊
Good luck in the competition! 😊
20th Jan 2016 4:54pm
20th Jan 2016 1:16am
In addition to the palpable loss and hope, the form drops like a flood down the cheeks. Best of luck in the comp!
20th Jan 2016 5:13pm
I am glad you picked up on the form, it wasn't my exact motive but it was something similar. Thanks Ahavati!
20th Jan 2016 1:28am
Loved this. Very witty and frighteningly accurate regarding the subject, every line added another bittersweet amount of depth. Enjoyed this a lot!
20th Jan 2016 5:14pm
Thank you so much for this comment. :) Very much appreciated. I am glad you enjoyed it so. And welcome to the site! I hope to see more of your work on here. :)
20th Jan 2016 12:10pm
really like the beat and musicality of this piece - if there is justice it should be a winner - such a well written, thought out piece :-)
20th Jan 2016 5:16pm
Thank you kind friend! I am glad you noticed the rhythm. Unfortunately, I didn't win but the winner was a fantastic poem by Taryn. I feel pretty good about it. haha. Thank you David!
21st Jan 2016 3:52am
I love your writing Sam. This feels like an experiment on the short form and emotional realism. I feel like we're both taking a little trip down this road. Great expression. Sorry you didn't win the comp ;( But Taryn did rock it!
21st Jan 2016 5:28pm
Thank you! Taryn did a great job. I am trying to get back into the practice of writing more regularly. It is hard some days. I need to catch up on reading too! I try to get on here more and have a lot to catch up on! :) You have been busy!
