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Dream Weaver
the breeze of you, it
musses my hair and just as
quickly is woven
through with the night when you
rub a lamp and magic falls
distant flurries from
the arc of galactic arms
change their colors as
you reach up to gather them
knotted into dreams for me
what have I for you
bringer of all heaven-sent
and scented as proof
to woo you stay, to have me
know your universe as mine
This is a Rensaku = linked Tanka
This poem has been entered into the DU competition "The smile that cracked your normalcy"[/center]
musses my hair and just as
quickly is woven
through with the night when you
rub a lamp and magic falls
distant flurries from
the arc of galactic arms
change their colors as
you reach up to gather them
knotted into dreams for me
what have I for you
bringer of all heaven-sent
and scented as proof
to woo you stay, to have me
know your universe as mine
This is a Rensaku = linked Tanka
This poem has been entered into the DU competition "The smile that cracked your normalcy"[/center]
Published 2nd Dec 2015
| Edited 10th Jan 2017
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2nd Dec 2015 10:19am
And i see a dream catcher being made...by him from her...gazing at mine over my bed...it is suposed to comfort my sleep.
This poem makes me sad. They cannot rub lamps and make magic for us..or make charms to make love stay.
Its the human reality in us..that takes the other by surprise..as if they didnt know, we are human...and magic does not exist.
Something vanishes. The great heart conundrum of living in each others poetry.
Beautiful dove
Love
Jennifer
This poem makes me sad. They cannot rub lamps and make magic for us..or make charms to make love stay.
Its the human reality in us..that takes the other by surprise..as if they didnt know, we are human...and magic does not exist.
Something vanishes. The great heart conundrum of living in each others poetry.
Beautiful dove
Love
Jennifer
Gosh Jennifer lovely, I'm sorry I didn't mean to post something that would sadden you so. I realize you're speaking about a dream catcher that you actually have on a wall in your bedroom, yes? But this piece I've written (only just earlier as one day passed into the start of the next) is about a celestial lover who she is enchanted by as a dream weaver. Actually, while I wrote it I felt like I was adrift and bedazzled by the way deep space interacts with something as earth-bound like myself. You may have noticed even this early on since you and I met how much my passion for astronomy affects my writing. Or perhaps it's too soon to assume that you have. But sweetheart, please... don't be sad. Let yourself join in the magic that I feel even when things go wrong which helps me to recover. I tend to be dreamy-eyed about such things.
precious is the moment,
with love,
your Jadey <3
precious is the moment,
with love,
your Jadey <3
2nd Dec 2015 6:38pm
Wow
I think I love you...both...lol
How can a simple reply from one to the other make my heart skip, slip and stutter?
The words of mine, I hope, will reach into your
life and touch it with wonder, as your words do mine...thank you
I think I love you...both...lol
How can a simple reply from one to the other make my heart skip, slip and stutter?
The words of mine, I hope, will reach into your
life and touch it with wonder, as your words do mine...thank you
2nd Dec 2015 11:54pm
Gosh dear, at first I wasn't sure if these words of yours were meant for my eyes. Or if your comment speaks of how you might have embraced my poem, I'm not sure but, I'd like to think so.
4th Dec 2015 7:44pm
5th Dec 2015 3:16am
