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Nymph-et-amine
nymph-et-amine
you walked in the room
and checked your surroundings
eyes darting back at me
as you scanned all around me
all clear?
i ask, chuckling softly
a wave of relief washes over her gently
the sense of security
cancels her worry
of previous men
that abused their authority.
she crawls into my arms
and she melts instantly
feeling the accelerated rhythm
my heart creates when it beats
she whimpers softly
and i can feel her shaking
trembling violently
from severe anxiety
from previous men
who abused their authority
ever so gently i trace her features
erasing each tear as it escapes her
her beautiful eyes so full of pain .
she looks into mine
and then the mood changed
because in my eyes
besides being green
she sees a eqaul pain
tortured soul , almost the same
we just both want to be free.
a connection is made
the spark of the flame
intense euphoria floods
thru are arteries and veins
a firestorm ensues
socks shirts and shoes
fly every which way
as we undress to erotically play
her intoxicating pheromones
instantly hit my switch
i turn from so soft and gentle
into a sexual tyrannosaurus
i devoured her graceful
she moans and she screams
dripping so heavily
her juices run down my cheek
the head of my cock
is throbbing so heavenly
i slide it in fast, thrusting deeply
the sound of her gasps
invoke even more in me
it sounds like murder
is being committed
from the sounds of her
begging, moaning screaming
she says, omg I love you you you
in a trembling quivering manner
her thighs are shaking violently
as she gushes all over me
spraying me efficiently
she covers me blissfully
then like the beginning
she collapses on me
and melts again so very easily
you walked in the room
and checked your surroundings
eyes darting back at me
as you scanned all around me
all clear?
i ask, chuckling softly
a wave of relief washes over her gently
the sense of security
cancels her worry
of previous men
that abused their authority.
she crawls into my arms
and she melts instantly
feeling the accelerated rhythm
my heart creates when it beats
she whimpers softly
and i can feel her shaking
trembling violently
from severe anxiety
from previous men
who abused their authority
ever so gently i trace her features
erasing each tear as it escapes her
her beautiful eyes so full of pain .
she looks into mine
and then the mood changed
because in my eyes
besides being green
she sees a eqaul pain
tortured soul , almost the same
we just both want to be free.
a connection is made
the spark of the flame
intense euphoria floods
thru are arteries and veins
a firestorm ensues
socks shirts and shoes
fly every which way
as we undress to erotically play
her intoxicating pheromones
instantly hit my switch
i turn from so soft and gentle
into a sexual tyrannosaurus
i devoured her graceful
she moans and she screams
dripping so heavily
her juices run down my cheek
the head of my cock
is throbbing so heavenly
i slide it in fast, thrusting deeply
the sound of her gasps
invoke even more in me
it sounds like murder
is being committed
from the sounds of her
begging, moaning screaming
she says, omg I love you you you
in a trembling quivering manner
her thighs are shaking violently
as she gushes all over me
spraying me efficiently
she covers me blissfully
then like the beginning
she collapses on me
and melts again so very easily
Published 21st Nov 2015
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21st Nov 2015 2:14pm
21st Nov 2015 6:27pm
thanks wolf , although i thought it was a bit timid, but i was falling out, and its my first adult poem ive written
21st Nov 2015 2:51pm
I enjoyed reading, but I have a few things since you checked "honest critique".
You need to spell and grammar check before posting, please, especially on a site dedicated to literary folk.
Nymphetamine, not a terribly original title, I can assume you listen to CoF.
The language dips in and out of very emphatic and emotional. I'm not sure if this is to intensify the dichotomy between the rational self and the primal sex or if it's just a lack of sustained emotion while writing. I'll assume the former because I love meta language with such intensity.
I know I sound negative and I'm sorry, but there's so many good lines and those few things just bring me out of the moment when reading.
Overall, damn good read. Some strong images that I loved, solid concept and welcome to DU.
Thank you for the post.
You need to spell and grammar check before posting, please, especially on a site dedicated to literary folk.
Nymphetamine, not a terribly original title, I can assume you listen to CoF.
The language dips in and out of very emphatic and emotional. I'm not sure if this is to intensify the dichotomy between the rational self and the primal sex or if it's just a lack of sustained emotion while writing. I'll assume the former because I love meta language with such intensity.
I know I sound negative and I'm sorry, but there's so many good lines and those few things just bring me out of the moment when reading.
Overall, damn good read. Some strong images that I loved, solid concept and welcome to DU.
Thank you for the post.
ya, i agree I need to spell check, and structure is lacking, which I've asked for help with . like I've been saying, this is my first time, and first month actually, willingly and conscientiously writing poetry, since they forced in school and censored the fuck out of you,
Also don't act like you know shit about me, my emotions, and how i feel them,, you dont know shit about me
Unless you're one of my ex females and all butt hurt and jealous, or a miserable troll. Or your a new toy one of my ex bitches now rides .
because there's no reason for you to have the attitude or be angry at my poetry at all,
so dont sit there with your sarcastic " honest critique" bs and saying i go in and out of interest and emotion with the write, as well as saying, its a good concept tho.
no concept crystal ball , the lady and i were shooting amphetamines and fucking,
and yes i love cof , it helped inspire the title
as well as the above-stated fact,
if you dont belive me come on thru i
need to hustle some anyway
and we can get fucked up.
oh and i got the black to
if thats what your into.
Also don't act like you know shit about me, my emotions, and how i feel them,, you dont know shit about me
Unless you're one of my ex females and all butt hurt and jealous, or a miserable troll. Or your a new toy one of my ex bitches now rides .
because there's no reason for you to have the attitude or be angry at my poetry at all,
so dont sit there with your sarcastic " honest critique" bs and saying i go in and out of interest and emotion with the write, as well as saying, its a good concept tho.
no concept crystal ball , the lady and i were shooting amphetamines and fucking,
and yes i love cof , it helped inspire the title
as well as the above-stated fact,
if you dont belive me come on thru i
need to hustle some anyway
and we can get fucked up.
oh and i got the black to
if thats what your into.
28th Nov 2015 3:49pm
I'll leave the above comment of yours here, since we talked by PM, but normally I would have hidden it, as it does have a bit of unnecessary in-your-face as a reply to the other member, who to me, honestly looked like they were posting a constructive critique.
29th Nov 2015 1:23am
i agree and agreed his solid opions , but came across to me at least ,to me just brass and all huffy puffy ex: you say you want :" honest critque" ? why cant it be honest critueq , it felt like when someone puts there hands up in the and does it to mock you and ex 2: you go in and out of interest like you werent into or somthin, acting like you know 100% how how someonw feelin is just no , a then by ssay but it a good concept implying it's a complete iie and nothing is real at all about it,conept is an idea, maybe its just a shittimg poem in a poets first handful and not a li , he did try hes just new.thats how i felt and came across too me. but i toattly agree , i was rude and in the face, i thibk it was my first or second day? but we chatted , and i gave you my word , ill handle situations professinaly , boxers dont fight in the street they fight in the ring , shouldnt puke on there paper with nonsense, they should use there minds think and processs and from
22nd Nov 2015 4:44am
22nd Nov 2015 10:59am
hey thanks man, hope to see some of yours? master poet but no poems man you got to fix that,haha, hows call i just moved from the west coast and miss it terribly
