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As Eye-Gather...
As EYE-lay dreamin'
streamin' visage of days
n'ver gone by...
I see, a multitude of joy,
expressions of true unity
those that teeter 'on the brink'
a love can't be THAT fantastic
must be fantasy
Strollin' the mines of hope's
'armored chest' the latch-key
connection of a you n' me
Skies bloom, with the audacity
to sparkle within the grasp
it's 'Maker's Mother' yet I gasp...
Languishin' as liquid crystal displays
become my eye, viewin' life like
imagery of real love n' why, it's
an ever elusive mystery...
streamin' visage of days
n'ver gone by...
I see, a multitude of joy,
expressions of true unity
those that teeter 'on the brink'
a love can't be THAT fantastic
must be fantasy
Strollin' the mines of hope's
'armored chest' the latch-key
connection of a you n' me
Skies bloom, with the audacity
to sparkle within the grasp
it's 'Maker's Mother' yet I gasp...
Languishin' as liquid crystal displays
become my eye, viewin' life like
imagery of real love n' why, it's
an ever elusive mystery...
Published 5th Nov 2015
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5th Nov 2015 8:01pm
WOW!
"Strollin' the mines of hope's
'armored chest' the latch-key
connection of a you n' me
Skies bloom, with the audacity
to sparkle within the grasp
it's 'Maker's Mother' yet I gasp... "<--- Dude, this flow was smoother than silk! Felt good to my eyes...
Your pen is surgical ..... Loved this Rich!
"Strollin' the mines of hope's
'armored chest' the latch-key
connection of a you n' me
Skies bloom, with the audacity
to sparkle within the grasp
it's 'Maker's Mother' yet I gasp... "<--- Dude, this flow was smoother than silk! Felt good to my eyes...
Your pen is surgical ..... Loved this Rich!
6th Nov 2015 1:47am
Aaawwww n from THEE smoothest of the smooth, I must say deeply flattered I am... :) thank you my sweetness :)
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6th Nov 2015 2:04pm
Well, like for Rain I'm grateful beyond words for your continued support on my ink. I truly appreciate it. :)
5th Nov 2015 11:48pm
Lovely phrasing, dearest.. lil jewels that are bold, yet gentle, tucked everywhere..;)
"n'ver gone by..." <~~ this one stings a bit.. but sets your mood to spill shinies.. I like it!
"the latch-key
connection of a you n' me"
~one of those favored jewels I was talkin 'bout..
"Languishin' as liquid crystal displays
become my eye, viewin' life like"
~this was the most poignant part fer me.. 'launguishin' being most effective in your reflections..
pen praises fer your so *Smooth.. <~~as a noun of course ;)
~d
"n'ver gone by..." <~~ this one stings a bit.. but sets your mood to spill shinies.. I like it!
"the latch-key
connection of a you n' me"
~one of those favored jewels I was talkin 'bout..
"Languishin' as liquid crystal displays
become my eye, viewin' life like"
~this was the most poignant part fer me.. 'launguishin' being most effective in your reflections..
pen praises fer your so *Smooth.. <~~as a noun of course ;)
~d
6th Nov 2015 2:12pm
Aaaawwww my precious Dark...
What can I say to describe how
u placed such a huge smile pon my mug lol... Thanks for all your sweet support :)
What can I say to describe how
u placed such a huge smile pon my mug lol... Thanks for all your sweet support :)
6th Nov 2015 2:55pm
oh my damn, the wordplay is breathtaking...
“As EYE-lay dreamin'
streamin' visage of days
n'ver gone by...”
^^^^^
loved these velveteen verses, poe
xoxox
“As EYE-lay dreamin'
streamin' visage of days
n'ver gone by...”
^^^^^
loved these velveteen verses, poe
xoxox
6th Nov 2015 4:23pm
That's funny... Using velveteen, to describe smoothness... I've iftrn imagined ur lips to be smooth
especially when you spill silken beauty
on a regular basis! :) thank u my sweetheart... :)
especially when you spill silken beauty
on a regular basis! :) thank u my sweetheart... :)
Anonymous
6th Nov 2015 5:12pm
Skies bloom, with the audacity
to sparkle within the grasp
it's 'Maker's Mother' yet I gasp.
how poetic indeed..
bro you bleed it
seed it
breed it
as pen inoculates paper..
givin birth to poetic vapors..
.
6th Nov 2015 7:45pm
Well bro. no less or more than YOU...
we like twins except for the Otha motha thingy lol... Thank you my dear bro. Always n forever... U know... :)
we like twins except for the Otha motha thingy lol... Thank you my dear bro. Always n forever... U know... :)
Anonymous
6th Nov 2015 6:46pm
..aint that the truth! lol
you nailed it..nothing like the mysteries of love.
The reference were very clever PIKM but then..you are a master at it :)
you nailed it..nothing like the mysteries of love.
The reference were very clever PIKM but then..you are a master at it :)
6th Nov 2015 7:48pm
My sweet Vee! Again u look better everytime I see ur pretty ass lol...
Anywho, thank u so much! I'm flattered as ever for ur words n support :)
Anywho, thank u so much! I'm flattered as ever for ur words n support :)
6th Nov 2015 7:21pm
'armored chest' the latch-key
connection of a you n' me '
loved this line...loved this work, as always..curtsy bow
connection of a you n' me '
loved this line...loved this work, as always..curtsy bow
6th Nov 2015 7:49pm
FF!! My dearest! Hi there, I'm happy to hear from u again, n love ur sweet lil curtsy bows :) thank u so much :)
7th Nov 2015 7:50pm
no it simply my pleasure derived from reading your works..curtsy and low bow..
7th Nov 2015 10:21pm
6th Nov 2015 8:22pm
7th Nov 2015 2:14am
You seem to sort of have live figured out ....lol
Very clever in your wordplay.
Cool ink ; )
Very clever in your wordplay.
Cool ink ; )
10th Nov 2015 4:54am
10th Nov 2015 9:53am
Well my dear bro. comin' from
such a poetical lyricist as yourself
I'm deeply flattered n grateful for
your praise, n support as always :)
such a poetical lyricist as yourself
I'm deeply flattered n grateful for
your praise, n support as always :)
Anonymous
18th Mar 2016 10:36am
You make feel and
wander in non explored
places of myself.
What is it like to have
protection. I have came
to the conclusion that
I will probably never
know.
But your words bring
great wrath inside.
wander in non explored
places of myself.
What is it like to have
protection. I have came
to the conclusion that
I will probably never
know.
But your words bring
great wrath inside.
18th Mar 2016 7:40pm
'Protection' wish I knew my friend
I virtually ALWAYS hurt-destroyed by caring, loving, wanting... Have no clue what protection feels like. Thank u for ur time n thoughts
I virtually ALWAYS hurt-destroyed by caring, loving, wanting... Have no clue what protection feels like. Thank u for ur time n thoughts
