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Intricate~
Fondness trailing the shift and bend in his words
caught me unprepared
I thought I’d lost the expertise to analyze what he meant
in-between the stitching of his sensual syllables
suggesting he still loves what reality hates.
Dividing out sections of unrestricted desire,
for me to partake in.
I can sense his pledge to live on
get filled-up on,
the fullness of my...
Nutritional Essence
*but I’m not sure how much of me he can govern*
I confess that I’m a handful on everyday basis
So I urge him to acquire me in tiny phases
sufficient enough....
to bring obligatory serenity to our spent faces,
on those days when the mood is so right.
My plight?
I’ve got my sights set on heights-
that I can only reach in flawless daydreams,
...and even though he’s out of reach for me
he still find ways to caress exclusive places
within my spirit, that I don’t usually let go of.
He's still piercing spots I didn’t grant access to,
and I swear he must have stashed the key code
that unlocks my heart, in plain view
because I feel his presence,
roaming inside of me
right here….
right now….
~Rain~
Written by
rain1courtel
(RainC)
Published 5th Nov 2015
| Edited 1st Apr 2016
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 4:03am
Yeah, what a man, huh? ;) It's a wonderful thang' when someone has the perfect touch, to move you in ways, you didn't think possible. I'm so damn happy that you're in love with this ink and you're taking her home with you. :)
....and thank you for correcting me, teacher... *giggles* Xo
....and thank you for correcting me, teacher... *giggles* Xo
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 3:15am
Dios mio Rain, what an incredible image! I like the picture too
I love this and that beginning makes me want to take a dive ; )
I need it on my list.
I love this and that beginning makes me want to take a dive ; )
I need it on my list.
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aww gorgeous, your excitement warms my mushy heart. I do love that pic too, so beautiful and unique!
Thankya pretty one! Appreciate the poetic love and our sistership, Lena. :) Thanks for the listing.... Xo
Thankya pretty one! Appreciate the poetic love and our sistership, Lena. :) Thanks for the listing.... Xo
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 4:33am
.....always amazed at your ability to caress the most beautiful hues upon such an inspired canvas. Brilliantly done. The kind of ink that tends to steal one's heart.
Finesse 🎨
Finesse 🎨
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 4:41am
....a girl does try! Beautiful words giving by you, Sheldon!
I thank you for the love. Appreciate the listing....
I thank you for the love. Appreciate the listing....
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 4:46am
Oh to be snared so passionately! He can believe he set a trap for you, but you put your foot in the noose quite deliberately. If it makes him feel better, more powerful in his manly way, why not. But he should instead be asking, "who has wrapped me in silk webbing?"
JJ
JJ
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Dammmm! You flipped that shit perfectly! I'll take it! haha... I must confess, I do have this powerful love dust that I sprinkle over my southern charm. It works, sometimes, and sometimes it doesn't.... lol
Maybe I should bottle it up, huh?! Sell it half-price. ;) Thanks suga!
Maybe I should bottle it up, huh?! Sell it half-price. ;) Thanks suga!
Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 4:36pm
Hal-price? Give me a case full! Lol, you don't need to mark those bottles down, Hell, double the price and live a commutable life... your PM put things in a different lght, thank you Rain!
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 6:02pm
...glad you finally saw the light. lollol.... Thanks for keeping her too.... :)
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Anonymous
5th Nov 2015 11:58pm
I'd buy your "powerful love dust" in a heartbeat, if it meant it would re~ignite the love that has gone dead in me. . .Miss Rain. . .you are *beautiful* as you are wise. . .I'm glad we meet. . .xo, Devlin.
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Re: Re. Intricate~
6th Nov 2015 2:00am
awwww my darlin' Lyn! Keep hope inside you, right next to the love that appears dormant, all it takes is the right person to blow a kiss at your soul, and love will live again. :) You are such a special woman, I too am happy our paths have crossed. Thanks sexy!
Pen Hug~
Pen Hug~
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 9:48am
What a real 'mind massage' Rain, makes me jealous as hell 'cos I ain't him! Impeccably penned as usual. Talent drips from you ink like liquid silk.
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 6:01pm
'mind massage',~... why yes sir, you're right! lol..... I likes that!
awww.... don't be jelly, you can be him if you want... :) Thanks my funnyman and appreciate the listing...
awww.... don't be jelly, you can be him if you want... :) Thanks my funnyman and appreciate the listing...
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 5:37pm
"Intricate" just as the woman who penned this stellar sensually arousing, n alluring piece... I'm drawn to it, the words n pic. Like a moth to flame my sweet Rain! :)
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 6:05pm
blusing~
Thank you for commenting in such a sexy way, Rich! :)
Appreciate-ya....
Thank you for commenting in such a sexy way, Rich! :)
Appreciate-ya....
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 6:08pm
wow! what a beauteous ballad, sweet as special dark chocolate, bearing glass panels to your heart with a preponderance of poetic beauty, "I confess that I’m a handful on everyday basis / So I urge him to acquire me in tiny phases / sufficient enough".... sometimes rain is misty sometimes a monsoon, but without it there is no life...
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 6:20pm
"sometimes rain is misty sometimes a monsoon, but without it there is no life... "<---I see what you did there! ;)
Your words soothe my soul Dean! Thanks for the ink love....
Your words soothe my soul Dean! Thanks for the ink love....
Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 8:00pm
I like what "intricate" conveys as opposed to delicate. Reminds me of the Quincy Jones' song, "You Put A Move On My Heart".
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Nov 2015 9:10pm
Oh I can totally get the reference of song from this ink, now that you've mentioned it. Thanks jazz for adding your presence around my parts.... Appreciate ya~
Re. Intricate~
6th Nov 2015 8:16am
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7th Nov 2015 3:04am
Re. Intricate~
6th Nov 2015 2:47pm
god's tits! shibari with words... only you can ink knots of this caliber & keep it classy like a mofo ;)
"I thought I’d lost the expertise to analyze what he meant
in-between the stitching of his sensual syllables
suggesting he still loves what reality hates.
Dividing out sections of unrestricted desire,
for me to partake in.
I can sense his pledge to live on
get filled-up on,
the fullness of my...
Nutritional Essence"
^^^^^^
laaaaaawd green jelly! that's utterly brilliant, lady rain!
loveeeeeeed this
xoxox
"I thought I’d lost the expertise to analyze what he meant
in-between the stitching of his sensual syllables
suggesting he still loves what reality hates.
Dividing out sections of unrestricted desire,
for me to partake in.
I can sense his pledge to live on
get filled-up on,
the fullness of my...
Nutritional Essence"
^^^^^^
laaaaaawd green jelly! that's utterly brilliant, lady rain!
loveeeeeeed this
xoxox
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Re: Re. Intricate~
7th Nov 2015 3:09am
You are my DU stoker, you know that?! And if I had a cock, I would have a rise.... o_O They didn't come out right. lol... but you get the message. I respect your pen so damn much, to the point of reading replies such as this, pumps me up hard. Thanks my talented dancedoll.... Xo
Re. Intricate~
6th Nov 2015 5:16pm
intricate indeed..lady how you weave your words..smh..imprinter..that's the word that comes to mind when reading you
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7th Nov 2015 3:30am
You're one of the best word-weaver I've come across Naajir! Thanks hun.....
Re. Intricate~
6th Nov 2015 6:24pm
Wonderful. I hate to point out specific parts because I don't want to take from the rest, but this really shined for me.
"I confess that I’m a handful on everyday basis
So I urge him to acquire me in tiny phases
sufficient enough....
to bring obligatory serenity to our spent faces,
on those days when the mood is so right. "
"I confess that I’m a handful on everyday basis
So I urge him to acquire me in tiny phases
sufficient enough....
to bring obligatory serenity to our spent faces,
on those days when the mood is so right. "
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Re: Re. Intricate~
7th Nov 2015 3:32am
I'm just happy to have your creative eyes upon me ink, JT. No specific parts pointed out are needed...
Pen love~
Pen love~
Re. Intricate~
Anonymous
6th Nov 2015 7:13pm
It takes a real man to appreciate a woman with all her depths and beauty..and to 'handle' her just right.
I must say it's a rare find nowadays..most are just boys ;)
Incredible ink and the picture enhancing this gem is a real treat Rain.
I must say it's a rare find nowadays..most are just boys ;)
Incredible ink and the picture enhancing this gem is a real treat Rain.
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Re: Re. Intricate~
7th Nov 2015 3:41am
aww.... love your comment Rina! Thank you pretty lady. And I ditto your sentiments. Finding a strong man to handle a complex woman and love her and all of her hard edges can be difficult...
Pen hug~
Pen hug~
Re. Intricate~
9th Nov 2015 1:46am
Access was indeed granted
In daydreams
Where no barriers exist
No need for keys
One will wait an eternity
For the intesly provocative woman
That is a handful
Of exotic mocha curves
That pours seductive rain
Just to be lost in her ocean
Before she wakes from the daydream
The pic is breath taking
Which continues through your writing
In daydreams
Where no barriers exist
No need for keys
One will wait an eternity
For the intesly provocative woman
That is a handful
Of exotic mocha curves
That pours seductive rain
Just to be lost in her ocean
Before she wakes from the daydream
The pic is breath taking
Which continues through your writing
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Re: Re. Intricate~
9th Nov 2015 3:54am
.....you are just so damn good for my ego. smh....
crushing on your comment! Thank you luv, and I appreciate the listing...
crushing on your comment! Thank you luv, and I appreciate the listing...
Re. Intricate~
3rd Dec 2015 9:52am
WOW!!
"I’ve got my sights set on heights-
that I can only reach in flawless daydreams,
...and even though he’s out of reach for me
he still find ways to caress exclusive places
within my spirit, that I don’t usually let go of. "
These few lines are my favourite from this immaculate piece of structured ink. One begins to acknowledge the irony you portray in having high aspirations that are only attainable in a "flawless daydream". Whoever inspired this particular piece must have left you with the kind of memories you smile to yourself about here and then.
TOTALLY LOVE IT!
"I’ve got my sights set on heights-
that I can only reach in flawless daydreams,
...and even though he’s out of reach for me
he still find ways to caress exclusive places
within my spirit, that I don’t usually let go of. "
These few lines are my favourite from this immaculate piece of structured ink. One begins to acknowledge the irony you portray in having high aspirations that are only attainable in a "flawless daydream". Whoever inspired this particular piece must have left you with the kind of memories you smile to yourself about here and then.
TOTALLY LOVE IT!
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Re: Re. Intricate~
5th Dec 2015 6:09pm
....this comment literally moved me in a special way! I'm always lifted after reading your kind remarks.
Thank you so much Dala! I appreciate your poetic-support immensely!
Thanks for shelving her....Xo
Thank you so much Dala! I appreciate your poetic-support immensely!
Thanks for shelving her....Xo