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Rough Sex
tie me up
make it tight
it has to last
through the night
bite me eat me
make me bleed
i want to make sure
you fulfill my need
i like it rough theres
nothing else left to say
if you dont like it
get the fuck away
i search for a girl who
can give it to me right
one who likes rough sex
at all hours of the night
if you are out there
and you truly exsist
if you want me i warn
you im a kinky bitch
rough sex is
what i love the most
i will have rough sex
till im a ghost
Published 16th Jun 2011
| Edited 18th Jun 2011
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16th Jun 2011 5:10pm
What is it, why do people do it? Essentially this reads like a perverted nursery rhyme! Erotica, I do believe is the hardest style to pull off, I think I have read one good erotica poem on this site, and this is not it. Sorry.
16th Jun 2011 5:16pm
That's cool. Not everything I write is to please others. It just how I feel inside. Thanks for the honesty though.
16th Jun 2011 5:28pm
16th Jun 2011 7:46pm
16th Jun 2011 7:47pm
I have to disagree, everything that one writes that is from the heart is the best to read. I found this to be interesting and honest. I found it to be a great piece.
But not everything that comes from the heart can be labeled poetry. A mere emotion, a poem/poet does not make.
As far as the poem goes, you say your not looking for a critique just some advice, so I would say watch the spellings/typos... "fullfill" and "untill".
As far as the poem goes, you say your not looking for a critique just some advice, so I would say watch the spellings/typos... "fullfill" and "untill".
16th Jun 2011 7:48pm
Raw and visceral. Dark and real. Cuts through all the crap. An antidote for chocolates and flowers and soft-focus movies.
16th Jun 2011 7:53pm
Thanks darkvampire and dontforsakeurself. At least someone understands the undeniying feeling I feel.
18th Jun 2011 7:25am
Did anyone else notice that the only ones who had a problem with this poem were guys? They just jealous cause only a woman can truly please me.
21st Jun 2011 5:44am
I agree with darkvampire, raw and no need for changed. I dont usually like erotic poems on this site. Good job
19th Aug 2011 11:55pm
30th Aug 2011 4:24am
i correct myself earlier
I personally don't like it rough
Or at least... not that rough o_o
I personally don't like it rough
Or at least... not that rough o_o
30th Aug 2011 4:33am
I wasn't being serious. I just got bored and wrote about what my cousins where talking about.
3rd Sep 2011 4:26am
3rd Sep 2011 2:22pm
30th Nov 2011 7:57pm
Yes it is like a dirty nursery ryhme but that what draws you in. The rawness of it is what keeps you reading. And in my personal opinion who writes for other people in general? Anybody that does that is just another tool.
20th Aug 2016 5:19am
