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Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
*for anyone willing to understand this better, please go to ElleCole's page for the beginning to this story
she's an outstanding, lyrical writer
an' inspired this response lol*
She thinks of me
as Dr. Jekyll, Mr. Hyde-
It's a damn shame, because
she knows not from the fear I hide...
I think it's my pride,
past pains buried to the depths
n' yet, I can't put it aside...
Always had hoped she'd see
me as her hero, that's what I wanted to be...the 'day saver' the 'pain slayer' a savior for the love
I joyously gave her...
So strange, she never can seem
to see, she's the HEROINE who
saved me...
I've wandered, worthless,
hopeless... emotions churnin'
within...not a day or night-
past without the quakin' tears
my ears, still hear the endless
quiet of my life...
Though, I'm supposed to be
her hero, I don't know how to
tell her so... I try desperately
to fend off the 'demon's light...'
Sad, I know, that she thinks me
of such a darkly, split personality
when the truth is this reality...
HERO, I only wish to be,
but to me the REAL hero is she,
a woman of unflappable faith,
an angel who's unlocked the gate
-way before I could recognize
the state...of my beaten heart...
she's an outstanding, lyrical writer
an' inspired this response lol*
She thinks of me
as Dr. Jekyll, Mr. Hyde-
It's a damn shame, because
she knows not from the fear I hide...
I think it's my pride,
past pains buried to the depths
n' yet, I can't put it aside...
Always had hoped she'd see
me as her hero, that's what I wanted to be...the 'day saver' the 'pain slayer' a savior for the love
I joyously gave her...
So strange, she never can seem
to see, she's the HEROINE who
saved me...
I've wandered, worthless,
hopeless... emotions churnin'
within...not a day or night-
past without the quakin' tears
my ears, still hear the endless
quiet of my life...
Though, I'm supposed to be
her hero, I don't know how to
tell her so... I try desperately
to fend off the 'demon's light...'
Sad, I know, that she thinks me
of such a darkly, split personality
when the truth is this reality...
HERO, I only wish to be,
but to me the REAL hero is she,
a woman of unflappable faith,
an angel who's unlocked the gate
-way before I could recognize
the state...of my beaten heart...
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Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
Ah! This is great..but mih ding dong read Elles latest piece not this one i think...will go back. and do it twice was so nice..you should publish them together! Well...actually..she is a new member..this is a great way to get people on her page. And i see now this was a response not a colab.... And you are correct! She is very talented..what a charming intelligent lady.
Thank you Po..for coming in with such an uplifting comment after that dude was hard on me..was crushed and...you were mih hero today. I truely appreciate it.
Love
Jennifer
Thank you Po..for coming in with such an uplifting comment after that dude was hard on me..was crushed and...you were mih hero today. I truely appreciate it.
Love
Jennifer
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
23rd Oct 2015 1:58pm
Well I'm sure her piece worked well as a stand alone, n yea turned out as a post/respond type of collab. lol thanks
Appreciate the support always :)
Appreciate the support always :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
23rd Oct 2015 1:36pm
I love it!! Again sorry I jumped the gun. Lol it is an excellent write and I love how you used Heroine in that line. I was hoping you would use it that way. "An Angel who has unlocked the gate" I thoroughly enjoyed that line.
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
23rd Oct 2015 2:00pm
Well this was simply a result of what your piece said, n it inspired what came out... Happy you enjoyed of course n appreciate your very generous praise :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
23rd Oct 2015 7:18pm
Poe love this ink really moved me..
with lines like these..
"Though, I'm supposed to be
her hero, I don't know how to
tell her so... I try desperately
to fend off the 'demon's light...'
Sad, I know, that she thinks me
of such a darkly, split personality
when the truth is this reality...
HERO, I only wish to be, "
many see you as just that Poe..
love you Crim
with lines like these..
"Though, I'm supposed to be
her hero, I don't know how to
tell her so... I try desperately
to fend off the 'demon's light...'
Sad, I know, that she thinks me
of such a darkly, split personality
when the truth is this reality...
HERO, I only wish to be, "
many see you as just that Poe..
love you Crim
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
23rd Oct 2015 7:31pm
Aaaawwww Crim... U have me glassy eyed... But u Betta not tell anyone! lol
Thank u my dearest... Deeply appreciate you :)
Thank u my dearest... Deeply appreciate you :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
24th Oct 2015 4:57am
Bravo you two! Bravo! Fluidity was grand, Rich and Elle. So many great lines, can't really pick a fav.
Very nice.....
Very nice.....
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
24th Oct 2015 8:58am
Although I can understand why you said it, this piece was all me. :) Elle wrote n posted HER part on her page... If u haven't, you need to check it out. Thank you my sweetness always for your unending support :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
24th Oct 2015 5:17pm
Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
24th Oct 2015 11:40pm
Thank u so much my dear friend, I'm happy you liked it, n appreciate your continued support :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
25th Oct 2015 00:22am
all the boxes ticked with this one, lyrical flow, instant images and me wanting more..curtsy bow to a partnership of promise...
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
28th Oct 2015 9:33pm
Sorry I didn't catch this sooner... But thank u my sweetness, I'm happy you liked n truly appreciate u always! :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
25th Oct 2015 10:39pm
This is so touching. I can't wait to read Elle now that I see what she sparked in you.
I know.of men that want to be Hero's and some who pretend to be.......but you are definitely a good one Poe ; )
I know.of men that want to be Hero's and some who pretend to be.......but you are definitely a good one Poe ; )
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
25th Oct 2015 11:28pm
Aaaawwww thank you my sweetness! Truly appreciate your support n kind words always :)
Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
30th Mar 2016 2:56pm
"the 'day saver' the 'pain slayer' a savior for the love " A great line...Lovely!
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Re: Re. Hero in my Heart...ll (a collaborative venture w/ElleCole)
30th Mar 2016 3:22pm
Thank you! I nearly forgot this piece
until your comment lol... Truly appreciate your time n thoughts on my ink. :)
until your comment lol... Truly appreciate your time n thoughts on my ink. :)