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My Sympathy with the Devil
"Sooo Jenny grrrrrl" the devil growls
Low and slow..
Gaze meeting mine blue eyes..
With his as black as my darkest skies..
"I hear you in your turning slumber." he laughs sick..
He was strokin his disgustin burnt up prick..
Long curled over nails tippy tap...tap...
Tippy..tap.a.rap.. rap. a .rap...rumble..
On our bargaining table..
"Gotta deal for you dearie." with gnashing flash of filed toothed grin..
"If you think you are able.."
He knew my ability..
And now from dream.
My femme fragility...
I strut power slut, tits held high up front..most times..
But..in the deep recessed parts in the back of my mind....
It feeeels vain..and cruel.
My insides..I'm justa scared country gal...
Dreams of a Man who wants my insight..
Not my insides....
A Lancelot..cliche, i know..
But i dream of Camelot.
Now here Satan is..defiling my vulnerability..with his
Yellowed awful jiz..
"Jennifer, you will have your night and shining lover..for one night with me.."..tip tap.ripity rap..a rap..
"Under cover."
I choke down bile..
He smelled like eggs left decades in a pile..
Straggly white burning hair in a thick smoke halo..
Rack of gnarly unfatted skeletal sticks for a torso..
Pelvis like a suicide boomerang..
Fuckin this beast would leave me in shredded pain..
Figuratively and literally..
I stood up waaay to quick..
Knockin over my chair in a fit..
Leaned over and tip rapped thumped my long red nail in his chest!
Said "Oh! Hell no! wouldn't touch you n your skinny fallen dick!"
Smilin proud.."My good Man and me will happen on it's own accord!"
"Neva eva from a twisted screw from the likes of you and what you think is my ultimate reward."
Pantin now shakin scared as the potential aftermath effects slowly eased into my thought..
All of the sudden..the devil shook off...
His horrible grin..filled out his chest..
And the rest of his grotesque..
Showing a kind look and sweet face..
Said "Lovely, you bargained out of my disgrace."
"Please, i want you to never think of yourself cruel or bad again." Intent
In his now clear hazel eyes so pure..
A slow tear ran down his face..
I took my finger and traced..with kindness..
The tear away..
I gave a light kiss on his now tender mouth..
Said sincerely "Thanks darlin..I'll be sure and look you up if i eva get down waaay farther south."
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 18th Oct 2015
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Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 9:42pm
"My insides..I'm justa scared country gal...
Dreams of a Man who wants my insight..
Not my insides....
A Lancelot..cliche, i know..
But i dream of Camelot." <--love this, witty reference!
Much enjoyed Jen...
Dreams of a Man who wants my insight..
Not my insides....
A Lancelot..cliche, i know..
But i dream of Camelot." <--love this, witty reference!
Much enjoyed Jen...
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 9:47pm
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 10:02pm
WOW...THIS WAS PERFECTLY METAPHORICAL...this reads so smooth,yet gut wrenching content strategically placed within...I loved this adventure...and good for you for being aware baby girl...you've got a sexy sexy mind Jen...I'd love to crawl on in there sometime ;)
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 10:15pm
Lol Thanks Jordan..butchaknow...you know i am..aware. I write sex..but i know who i am what im afraid of..and you know..it goes way deeeeper than Lancelot..we both got baby in our past.
But i do truely appreciate your comment and hope from what i last read of yours you have found that light? It looked real good onya darlin!
Love sweetness
Jennifer
But i do truely appreciate your comment and hope from what i last read of yours you have found that light? It looked real good onya darlin!
Love sweetness
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 10:19pm
Sounds like you got the Devil's number Jennifer. He tried to intimidate you but you blew him off, so to speak. Then he attempted to charm you with a façade of vulnerability and sensitivity, but you're already on to him.
" took my finger and traced..with kindness..
The tear away..
I gave a light kiss on his now tender mouth..
Said sincerely "Thanks darlin..I'll be sure and look you up if i eva get down waaay farther south."
You show compassion but you're the one with the power here, not him. He'll just have to cool his heels. "Please allow me to introduce myself....."
" took my finger and traced..with kindness..
The tear away..
I gave a light kiss on his now tender mouth..
Said sincerely "Thanks darlin..I'll be sure and look you up if i eva get down waaay farther south."
You show compassion but you're the one with the power here, not him. He'll just have to cool his heels. "Please allow me to introduce myself....."
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
Hehe..im a man..yes Crow..purt much it. Ya always get mih. And i dig the song..my favorite cover ever probably Janes Addictions steel drum version..ooooh so good..
Give it a try.
Thanks sweetheart always
Love
Jennifer
Give it a try.
Thanks sweetheart always
Love
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 10:37pm
Love how you held your ground with the beast. That ole Satan can tempt even the most resolute soul. But you got the womanly strength to say no to him. This is just amazing story telling. I am in awe of your gift. Don't let that Lucifer get you. You know you've go the power to resist. Fine writing from a fine woman my love.
Love and candy kisses,
John
Love and candy kisses,
John
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
18th Oct 2015 10:47pm
Thank you for the sweet praise and sweet kiss darlin.. returned.i just read Night of the Dead..John..thats story telling at its finest..i have no more room on my readers list because of you..
It was so tragically gorgeous and seductive doll. Truely.
Love you too
Jennifer
It was so tragically gorgeous and seductive doll. Truely.
Love you too
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
......a very intuitive look into depths of this hellish character. Lucifer !! Sympathy indeed! The breaking of his semi-immortal spirit. Reaching past his ugly, contrite, snaggled-tooth soul to the heart of a once beautiful archangel. ( albeit one too many losing battles with the master). This almost scriptural.........a scriptural metaphor sister Gin. Hallelujah.
......and you had his rumpled arse upon the ropes. Shades of Revelation 12:9-12 mixed in with Charlie Daniel's "The Devil Went Down To Georgia" ........... sympathy for that old rascal indeed. ....... beaten and eaten by a beautiful succubus ; )
......and you had his rumpled arse upon the ropes. Shades of Revelation 12:9-12 mixed in with Charlie Daniel's "The Devil Went Down To Georgia" ........... sympathy for that old rascal indeed. ....... beaten and eaten by a beautiful succubus ; )
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
19th Oct 2015 00:49am
I'd hoped people would see it that way..not that i'd given in..love a screw..sure but not comprimised..and not without love darlin.
The last line was seein his archangel side..tellin him never less i fallll waaaay deep. N then? V doubtfull. Never
Thank you brother..
Love
Jennifer
The last line was seein his archangel side..tellin him never less i fallll waaaay deep. N then? V doubtfull. Never
Thank you brother..
Love
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
19th Oct 2015 1:00pm
I will have to be careful you got rid of satan what will you do to get rid of me and others ha ha
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
19th Oct 2015 1:17pm
Oh Glen..Im an ornery bunny..one neva knows! Lol would neva eva wanna get rid of you cheeky monkey! 💋
Love
Jennifer
Love
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
19th Oct 2015 5:05pm
beautiful Jennifer this is full of striking images..
these lines really stood out to me..
"I choke down bile..
He smelled like eggs left decades in a pile..
Straggly white burning hair in a thick smoke halo..
Rack of gnarly unfatted skeletal sticks for a torso..
Pelvis like a suicide boomerang..
Fuckin this beast would leave me in shredded pain..
Figuratively and literally.."
excellent inking lovely lady..
love Brenda
these lines really stood out to me..
"I choke down bile..
He smelled like eggs left decades in a pile..
Straggly white burning hair in a thick smoke halo..
Rack of gnarly unfatted skeletal sticks for a torso..
Pelvis like a suicide boomerang..
Fuckin this beast would leave me in shredded pain..
Figuratively and literally.."
excellent inking lovely lady..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
Thanks so sweetness..an honor always to have your kind words on my page Bren..💋
Adore you..and your fine heart.
You should do mih song lyric comp! Perfect for you 👼
Love
Jennifer
Adore you..and your fine heart.
You should do mih song lyric comp! Perfect for you 👼
Love
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
19th Oct 2015 7:36pm
Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
19th Oct 2015 7:47pm
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
Anonymous
20th Oct 2015 1:48am
Jennifer, this is brilliant.. i can't find any words to say just how much i love this.. beautiful, my doll.. into the list it goes.. with love..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
20th Oct 2015 1:54am
Honey i am estatic you'd put it into your list..si fucking honored..
Doin a song lyrics comp based off mih Cold Heart of a Golden Ho
You must enter!
Love sugar (mih shiny boy)
Jennifer
Doin a song lyrics comp based off mih Cold Heart of a Golden Ho
You must enter!
Love sugar (mih shiny boy)
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
21st Oct 2015 10:29pm
lol, very humorous and talented write, enjoyed immensely.... plus im a sucker for rhymes...
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
21st Oct 2015 10:38pm
Well honey i just read your Word Weaver..you no sucker for it..i'd say rhyme is your bitch! Lol loved it darlin D..
Love
Jennifer
Love
Jennifer
Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
Anonymous
29th Oct 2015 7:41am
oh my word! this is just...just deliciously diabolical...love the humor weaved through out this write
and pleasing rhyme, my you wield a mighty talented pen...thoroughly enjoyed this
...thanks for sharing - _xx_ - miss. barrie
and pleasing rhyme, my you wield a mighty talented pen...thoroughly enjoyed this
...thanks for sharing - _xx_ - miss. barrie
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Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
29th Oct 2015 10:45am
Well thank you darlin! I love story tellin
..speakin of
..your preface is great, love ypur characters! Do hope you get that finished...then ill know a famous author! Intrigued by your screen name...the illus illustration?
Lobe
Jennifer
..speakin of
..your preface is great, love ypur characters! Do hope you get that finished...then ill know a famous author! Intrigued by your screen name...the illus illustration?
Lobe
Jennifer
Re: Re. My Sympathy with the Devil
Anonymous
29th Oct 2015 12:18pm
nope it's illusion...& it got cut off lol
Oh my...we'll be waiting a loooooong time, for that to happen (:
and you're very welcome! - xx (:
Oh my...we'll be waiting a loooooong time, for that to happen (:
and you're very welcome! - xx (:
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