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Autumn Whisper
I want to strip to skin
and hold silver moonbeams between my fingers.
we were all born under the stars,
the same stars made of fire and light.
too often we expect rewards because we want them
as if she was supposed to love me just because I tried,
because the sound of her name filled my mind with sunshine
and her smile burned into my heart like a thousand candles....
you can't expect the wind to sit silently at your feet
simply because you whispered its name.
The storms will rage through the swaying branches
and nothing can stop them but time.
When you throw a child into the air,
they don't curl up in a ball, bracing to hit the ground,
they spread out their arms,
hoping to grab and hold onto
the universe.
and hold silver moonbeams between my fingers.
we were all born under the stars,
the same stars made of fire and light.
too often we expect rewards because we want them
as if she was supposed to love me just because I tried,
because the sound of her name filled my mind with sunshine
and her smile burned into my heart like a thousand candles....
you can't expect the wind to sit silently at your feet
simply because you whispered its name.
The storms will rage through the swaying branches
and nothing can stop them but time.
When you throw a child into the air,
they don't curl up in a ball, bracing to hit the ground,
they spread out their arms,
hoping to grab and hold onto
the universe.
Published 15th Sep 2015
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Anonymous
15th Sep 2015 4:16am
Beautifully conveyed. Every line is perfect with depth.
awesome work Sammy.
awesome work Sammy.
15th Sep 2015 1:37pm
15th Sep 2015 2:29pm
"you can't expect the wind to sit silently at your feet
simply because you whispered its name. "
Gorgeous line. I so relate to this and you offer some incredible wisdom about some of the realities we tend to forget. Nature is our teacher and we need to she reminds us often how life really works. Excellent write Sammy.
simply because you whispered its name. "
Gorgeous line. I so relate to this and you offer some incredible wisdom about some of the realities we tend to forget. Nature is our teacher and we need to she reminds us often how life really works. Excellent write Sammy.
15th Sep 2015 4:12pm
Beautiful write Sam. To me, It's a perfect observation on the processing of letting go and embracing life through innocence. Love this.
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16th Sep 2015 7:40am
"too often we expect rewards because we want them
as if she was supposed to love me just because I tried, "
~effortless flow with effortless desires .. we never do get full control it seems /aka life!
perspectives are sharp here yet lovely in somber realizations.
"because the sound of her name filled my mind with sunshine
and her smile burned into my heart like a thousand candles...."
~this part just slams so many warm emotions into play. I am a mind~pic junkie[sshhh] & these lines were
intense. can almost hear this on an acoustic.. yes/no/maybe? ;)
Great power in your title, capturing the leaves falling off the trees as memories, goodbyes and more.
Then you go & *bam your ending in profound truths w/.."they spread out their arms" ..perfect capture!
wishin you days of smiling free~fall, sweetie.
~d
as if she was supposed to love me just because I tried, "
~effortless flow with effortless desires .. we never do get full control it seems /aka life!
perspectives are sharp here yet lovely in somber realizations.
"because the sound of her name filled my mind with sunshine
and her smile burned into my heart like a thousand candles...."
~this part just slams so many warm emotions into play. I am a mind~pic junkie[sshhh] & these lines were
intense. can almost hear this on an acoustic.. yes/no/maybe? ;)
Great power in your title, capturing the leaves falling off the trees as memories, goodbyes and more.
Then you go & *bam your ending in profound truths w/.."they spread out their arms" ..perfect capture!
wishin you days of smiling free~fall, sweetie.
~d
17th Sep 2015 6:22pm
"you can't expect the wind to sit silently at your feet
simply because you whispered its name.
The storms will rage through the swaying branches
and nothing can stop them but time."
This could be natural, but it could also refer to an elusive, turbulent lover or other personal turmoil. I might be projecting.
"When you throw a child into the air,
they don't curl up in a ball, bracing to hit the ground,
they spread out their arms,
hoping to grab and hold onto
the universe."
Magnificent last stanza! A lost sense of wonder. Fine work Sammy!
simply because you whispered its name.
The storms will rage through the swaying branches
and nothing can stop them but time."
This could be natural, but it could also refer to an elusive, turbulent lover or other personal turmoil. I might be projecting.
"When you throw a child into the air,
they don't curl up in a ball, bracing to hit the ground,
they spread out their arms,
hoping to grab and hold onto
the universe."
Magnificent last stanza! A lost sense of wonder. Fine work Sammy!
18th Sep 2015 1:42am
Followed the bead crumbs and wow! This was beautifully written. Loved it. :)
21st Sep 2015 6:07pm
