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insomnia (definitely a work in progress)

a summer wind blows
against my window
a restless breeze
shaking at my dreams

a sleepy moon
filling up the room
with a silver glow
like it knows what i don't know

the midnight air
doesn't seem to have a care
while my overactive brain
begs for sleep again

a weepy willow tree
swaying so serene
acting like it can't see
there's something troubling me

but i wish i knew
what this was, and what to do
to finally find relief
and slip off into sleep.

guitars courtesy of a very talented friend

Written by sammy4444

Published 29th Aug 2015

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Re. insomnia (definitely a work in progress)

Vee (Rina)

29th Aug 2015 2:41pm

I don't know which part is work in progress but this is fantastic Sammy. The poem itself is a stellar and then your voice singing to it, just doing it without some fancy production. Being yourself.
The contrast of feelings of insomnia which is so frustrating, maddening to the actual imagery, the serenity..is just beautiful. You've done a fantastic job.

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Re. insomnia (definitely a work in progress)

crowfly

- Edited 29th Aug 2015 6:37pm

29th Aug 2015 6:36pm

This does read like a lullaby with gentle imagery and a tone of melancholy. It might be best to think of insomnia in these terms, rather than fret too much about it. Fine guitar work and vocals by the way! Really enjoyed this Sammy.