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SECRETS...
Vile, haunting, secrets of you and me, never meant to be spoken, cruel, wretched secrets of you and me. So very, very young, my lord, what have you done, secrets of you and me. Secrets I whisper to chosen few, secrets of you and me. Shame, guilt, heartbreak, inflicted by secrets of you and me. Have you no soul, creating secrets of you and me? Brutal, evil, hateful secrets of you and me. Chilling, lost, filled with secrets of you and me. Confused, helpless, forever condemned to hell, together, your impulses threw away the only key, with secrets of you and me. My first TROPHY WIN.
Published 26th Aug 2015
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26th Aug 2015 10:51am
Everyone's got secrets
Question is: can u keep a secret?
The secrets you describe sound very destructive; maybe the trophy means victory for the person who told you his or her secrets and maybe just maybe that person feels like he or she won something so maybe trophy is theirs, not yours.
Your poetry contains elements of deceit ( bad connotations ) no offense bud
Question is: can u keep a secret?
The secrets you describe sound very destructive; maybe the trophy means victory for the person who told you his or her secrets and maybe just maybe that person feels like he or she won something so maybe trophy is theirs, not yours.
Your poetry contains elements of deceit ( bad connotations ) no offense bud
I wrote it for "CHILDHOOD EXPERIENCE". A comp. It was about my sister molesting me for years. Secrets can be destructive, and I can keep secrets, if it's trust building, and in friendship, thanx for your comment, I'll keep it in mind. No offense taken¡¡
17th Oct 2015 3:19pm
17th Oct 2015 11:26pm
I'm glad you liked it. To be put on your reading list is a true honor! I enjoy reading your work! Yes a true honor indeed😲! Thanx!
21st Oct 2015 2:37pm
beautifully raw and powerful, I can feel the fear and anger in this. thank you for sharing your secret.
excellent stuff - such an easy add :-)
excellent stuff - such an easy add :-)
7th Dec 2015 1:31pm
I just figured out how to tell who adds to their reading list, and you my friend, have been sadly ignored, by accident of course😔! So, I'M SORRY & A heartfelt THANK-YOU😉! For adding me to your reading list, always an honor, especially to a dedicated "fan" to my work! Thanx, SURVIVOR➰
21st Oct 2015 8:47pm
I feel that the most powerful weapon we possess is our voice! Our most devastating is shame. Being silenced for so long, it it feels powerful to rip the tape off. Your right, it was an emotionally dark time. Glad you enjoyed it!
30th Nov 2015 8:53am
another brilliant write my friend , and I am honored and you can always trust in me ,
3rd Dec 2015 3:16am
19th Dec 2015 6:16am
Some secrets are better not kept quiet, yet some skeletons are forced in the closet and tied up tightly so they never peak their hideous bones out from the corners they haunt. I feel your pain <3
19th Dec 2015 6:54am
They do haunt, sadly, I'm sorry if they caused you pain! Thank you for the feedback, it's greatly appreciated!. SURVIVOR➰
21st Dec 2015 00:23am
Oh no sweetheart, your write was superb. I am just having some issues all on my own. <3
22nd Dec 2015 2:25pm
The reason I'm putting it all out there is hopefully other's can relate & understand there not alone! You should never apologize for personal pain that leads your journey! Enjoying your comments, ➰
