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Not the Car Type of Key
Hot.
Today was just so blasted hot.
Sitting in a black truck, doing that 'He'll be right back' waiting game;
Having the 'I just gotta sing bad songs til the car starts again' look on my soul.
When I crack open a sweaty Arizona can
It echos moments later on my right,
And there's a beer drinking, hairy chested, white sedan having man with a toothy grin
And deviously handsome face.
He raises his can, nods, and flicks his sunglasses off.
I just want some cash.
"Hey, baby. You look hot."
I choke back a shot glass amount of bile
Because I don't need to be doing this.
I sweet talk, coyly- I don't know if I'm a bad girl or not. Maybe just a hurt girl who's making up for lost time.
I extend my hand out the window and say "Pleased to make your acquaintance,"
But I don't use my name.
I'd have to change it.
Today was just so blasted hot.
Sitting in a black truck, doing that 'He'll be right back' waiting game;
Having the 'I just gotta sing bad songs til the car starts again' look on my soul.
When I crack open a sweaty Arizona can
It echos moments later on my right,
And there's a beer drinking, hairy chested, white sedan having man with a toothy grin
And deviously handsome face.
He raises his can, nods, and flicks his sunglasses off.
I just want some cash.
"Hey, baby. You look hot."
I choke back a shot glass amount of bile
Because I don't need to be doing this.
I sweet talk, coyly- I don't know if I'm a bad girl or not. Maybe just a hurt girl who's making up for lost time.
I extend my hand out the window and say "Pleased to make your acquaintance,"
But I don't use my name.
I'd have to change it.
Published 31st Jul 2015
| Edited 4th Aug 2015
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31st Jul 2015 7:17pm
Sharp! Survival is often a messy business... Sometimes you gotta fight your way through a bad smell to get to a good one.
4th Aug 2015 3:10am
31st Jul 2015 8:03pm
i dig it, language and view of situation is on point and honest.
check a few lines for missing punctuation at their end. if you are gonna use it be consistent lady or not at all.
otherwise well done mam....
"I choke back a shot glass amount of bile"
good stuff.
check a few lines for missing punctuation at their end. if you are gonna use it be consistent lady or not at all.
otherwise well done mam....
"I choke back a shot glass amount of bile"
good stuff.
4th Aug 2015 3:16am
1st Aug 2015 9:25am
