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Dark Whispers
Your sex precedes your entrance
In your wispy black neglige
Pained by experience
Barely cloaking your argent skin
You are not here to be healed
But to disrobe the hurt
And come alive in your amphitheater of pleasure
As the midnight moon taps into your veins
Seducing you seducing me
Enraptured by sensorium
In a river of tangible heat
Meet my longing at your delta
Touching my edge
To your soft lips
to enter deep
with the radiant bursts of blood and electricity.
The mundane dissipates
While the voice is replaced with the language of the lion
In a storm of a fevered dream
Wrapped in a misty reality
As your rains flow from within
In a cry from nature
Softening my composure
To an elated seizure.
For a faint moment I look into her glowing azure eyes
That looked back into my abyss
And in a blink
The winds changed focus.
Beside my bed lies the black wispy neglige
Naturally limp.
I want to pick it up to smell her again
But it hurts to touch it.
In your wispy black neglige
Pained by experience
Barely cloaking your argent skin
You are not here to be healed
But to disrobe the hurt
And come alive in your amphitheater of pleasure
As the midnight moon taps into your veins
Seducing you seducing me
Enraptured by sensorium
In a river of tangible heat
Meet my longing at your delta
Touching my edge
To your soft lips
to enter deep
with the radiant bursts of blood and electricity.
The mundane dissipates
While the voice is replaced with the language of the lion
In a storm of a fevered dream
Wrapped in a misty reality
As your rains flow from within
In a cry from nature
Softening my composure
To an elated seizure.
For a faint moment I look into her glowing azure eyes
That looked back into my abyss
And in a blink
The winds changed focus.
Beside my bed lies the black wispy neglige
Naturally limp.
I want to pick it up to smell her again
But it hurts to touch it.
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Re. Dark Whispers
16th Jul 2015 6:35pm
This has a visionary quality to it until the end. Everything finally boils down to that negligee, a source of incandescent pain. Here's hoping the pleasure returns. Excellent work.
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Re: Re. Dark Whispers
16th Jul 2015 8:52pm
It took me a minute to digest your comment. And then thought about it...and yes, you are right. "incandescent pain" describes it well. Thank you for your comment and read, Crow.
Re. Dark Whispers
16th Jul 2015 8:20pm
Not many can write a poem that is both sophisticated and deeply erotic. Just excellent!
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Re: Re. Dark Whispers
16th Jul 2015 8:55pm
That is a comment of the highest order, VP. You flatter me. Thank you. Always look forward to your feedback.
Re. Dark Whispers
17th Jul 2015 4:51am
Sometimes the idea of the woman, the smell, the vision the anticipation of the woman can be so.......so, that after, there is a lonely feeling. Women have sex for different reasons than men, sometimes wrong reasons. This piece reminded me of times I seduced a man for the wrong reason, and sex made us both lonely after.
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Re: Re. Dark Whispers
17th Jul 2015 3:38pm
As a man, I don't really need a reason to have sex. Hahaha. In fact, there are more reasons to not have sex than to have sex. But I have been there, the aftermath of sex and suddenly you are questioning the whole ordeal. But sometimes a relationship gets consummated that leaves you wanting more, but it never finds its way.
Re. Dark Whispers
17th Jul 2015 9:58pm
I usually don't like erotic poems, but I admit this one hit somthin' in me ... I guess its the way its suppose to be ! Anyway good job on this !
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Re: Re. Dark Whispers
18th Jul 2015 1:37pm
Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate you saying and that it hit you in the right way.
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Re: Re. Dark Whispers
Thank you Taryn. I am always humbled by your read and comments. I am glad you liked this one. I almost didn't post this one. In fact, I originally was just going to post this:
You are not here to be healed /
But to disrobe the hurt /
And come alive in your amphitheater of pleasure /
And the midnight moon taps into your veins /
And leave it at that. But then I got carried away....
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18th Jul 2015 2:22pm
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Re. Dark Whispers
5th Aug 2015 5:06am
Jolts of consciousness, tingling placement, single points of sensation, focus awakens, the cadence stays strong. As the pen wanders on. It's a trip how natural stream-of-consciousness is when writing sexy fare, because there's such a one-ness of mind in that moment. Awesome work man!
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Re. Dark Whispers
5th Aug 2015 2:08pm
Thanks man. Sometimes a scene will build around a single line. Other times the scene is present and there are no lines.
Re. Dark Whispers
5th Aug 2015 10:22pm
I.., I cannot truly breathe, where are my
airs when needed. You're. so..!
airs when needed. You're. so..!
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